First I have to admit too, that part of Tom asking Bill about who does he belong to, IS hot. Very nice :)

I found this fic quite fascinating, because it wasn't only about their first time, but there were deeper level involved. I think, that there could have been material for even multi-chapter story instead of fitting it to one, but it's ok like this too. Maybe I found some parts being little too hasty and things were moving forward littlebit too fast. Yet again, I think that sex isn't the main point here, so don't worry about it. Background and psychological stuggle is still always interesting to read, so I little bit missed that.

I kind of loved the way you used short sentences and played with the words. Using one-sentence chapters fits here fine, because it was almost like stream of consciouness more that straight storytelling. So from the writing's POV this was great. The idea of those 3 words and using them like you did, revolving the whole story finally around them, was good.

This twincest-issue.. God, I'm so confused about it in general and I still love the thought so much. I think you caught the problems here well. Normally you can read much about it either being twincest or not, but now reader can find that grey area between brotherly love and twincest. Where you can actually draw a line? Besides I'm adoring that "twin-thing" between them. That tight bond that can be seeing everywhere. Also in brotherly sence. It's one of the most beautiful things on earth. You handled it well here, I liked it.

So... Nice fic, emotional and taking it's place really somewhere between different genres and different areas. You did good job here and those little things I mentioned (being too hasty mainly) didn't bother that much, because tense was so high here.

Author's Response: Awww danke fur such a long review ^^ er, to reply back to everything you've said:

I'm totally happy that you enjoyed the part with Tom asking Bill who he belonged to. I like a little aggression in my smut ^^

And I'm really happy that you caught on to the deeper issues I was trying to convey with repetition of those three words, and implementing them within their past, present and future.

I agree that it might have moved to fast, mostly because even though I was writing this over a span of two weeks, I knew that I had to finish this quickly or I'd become bored with the story (my ADHD makes it impossible for me concentrate on specific things at times)

anyways, I'm glad you liked the writing style. I tend to write the way with all of my stories mainly because the way I write is like one giant conscious stream of thought (and the thought of putting all of it together into one paragraph makes me squeamish lol) And as for the use of the three words, I like repetition, usually anyways, and I felt like in this story, the repetition was almost in their own heads. almost as if they were the ones repeating those words over and over.

And ah, the twincest-issue. I feel like I'm not God, so I can't judge other people. love is love and if it's mutual I can't truly stop it, you know? so i looked at it like this: the only time love is wrong is when it because an obtuse obsession because it is one-sided or when a person is continuously hurt because of their love. the twins love, whether brotherly or more, is obviously mutual, so I just try to show those aspects.

Anyways, I'll let you go now by writing that I'm really glad that you understood the entire concept of the story ^^ Feel free to IM or Email me if you want to talk more ^^

“You’re mine.” Tom forced out roughly before pulling out and thrusting even deeper into his younger brother.

Bill let out a scream of pleasure, his euphoria getting stronger as Tom verbally acknowledged his thoughts.

“Who do you belong to?” Tom demanded a he thrusted forcefully once more.

Bill’s lips quivered and his body shook as he tried to stay upright and answer Tom’s question.

“Who. Do. You. Belong. To.” Tom said, enunciating each word with a hard thrust to Bill’s prostate.-So hot

Author's Response: heh. danke, danke ^^ I always try to put at least one hot/aggressive scene in my fics ^^