Date: 01/21/08 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
“Oh, Tomi…” Bill murmured, leaning in for another one. “I was good, wasn’t I? Tell me I was good.” He purred.
I said this before, but this line just brought back scenes from early 'Hell and High Water.' Such a good line, it reminds me just how strong they are together and how their love has lasted through the years. It helps me understand their relationship with Corinne as well. I can easily imagine Bill and Tom having this need to create something beautiful between them that's only theirs, and though Corinne isn't their blood, she is their daughter.
Date: 01/21/08 02:37 pm Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
ooh, what does gustav want??? im so totally hooked one this story!!!
please update really soon!!!
Date: 01/21/08 01:22 pm Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
ohh i love this story i get all excited when i see a new chapter!!! you are an amazing writer keep it going!!! dont let it end!!! i thought gustav wasnt allowed to come back....ohh what will happen next?!?!?!
Date: 01/21/08 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
Wow I love this story so much!
That sound could be recorded and sold as sex.
That sentence was brilliant! I loved it ! :D And I wonder what Gusti wants.. And I really liked the Corrine/Jonathan scene ^^
Date: 01/21/08 08:55 am Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
Another amazing chapter hun!
You have made my day :D
I have to go back already?!” Corrine sat up, appalled. “Seriously Daddy, I need more time! I’m still traumatized and shit.”
“No, and watch your fucking language. Your father and I talked it over, and we decided you should be in school again. We don’t want your grades slipping.
that just cracked me up!
my mom said the same thing to me :D
hhhmmm I wonder what's going on at the airport *ponders*
Oh and LOLZZZ no one should interupt the Kaulitz twins' sex, unless you wan t to die *laughs*
Date: 01/21/08 08:15 am Title: Chapter 6: True Colors
Gustav is ready to suck up -.-
but it is definately perfect
Date: 01/20/08 03:27 pm Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
ooooh... words can't express how much I love this fic...
it's so sadistic and macabre...
it's just perfect.
My favorite ever... and that's an accomplishment.
it suits me so well... you're amazing.
I'm just overwhelmed.
didn't really think anyone was as twisted as me
Date: 01/18/08 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
loved it! XP
please write more soon because i can't wait xD
it was awsome and i just can't believe my eyes =0
ur kinda twisted aren't you? =P
but i mean that in a good way =D
Date: 01/18/08 01:41 pm Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
awsome Gustav is back! I would love to see andreas make a cameo... even if he don't keep up the great work...
Date: 01/18/08 09:18 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
What I liked best about this one.. Bill and Tom are still mad about each other. I love how they can find each other in any situation and be completely extracted from it because of the pull they have on each other.
Date: 01/18/08 06:29 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
hhahahaaa! gustav is evilaaa. lalalaa.
this is soo good. so so good
Date: 01/18/08 06:05 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
Woo, I love Tom's macho attitude at the end. So fierce. =P I don't trust Gustav, so I'm glad Tom doesn't as well. Bill, ironically, is too unsuspecting. But Corrine is so cute, lol. Stomping her foot. You've developed their characters so well that both sides of their personalities (well, to an outsider) completely fit together. It doesn't even seem awkward that young Corrine and naive Bill are killers at heart and kill people without a second thought. So, well done. I love this story. Update soon. =)
Date: 01/18/08 02:57 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
This is so good! I love it so much! Everything in it is just perfect!
Date: 01/18/08 01:39 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
my husband better be alive!!!!
love,
sabrina (yes, my real name :D)
Date: 01/18/08 01:26 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
ooh why's they bein' mean to gustav?
I actually couldn't read some of this chapter properly I had to skim, *shivers* but again fantastic chapter, an gustav has a baby! how cute.
Date: 01/18/08 12:16 am Title: Chapter 5: Just Dropping By
“Ew... No one wants to see their parents make out. That’s gross!”
Awww.... still a kid at heart I see ^-^ That's cute. But what I don't understand is Tomi being a total dick to Stavi. I mean, wtf? He was Tom's pet? What is this.. some kind of guinea pig experiment going on? I mean obviously Gusti has to be a badass.....being able to sneak into their place without anyone noticing....but there's gotta be another reason for him coming by, right?
Either way, Tomi is an ass.... I didn't like the way he acted in those last few paragraphs. It's cute though. He has a wife and a song ^,^
What about Georg? Will you be bringing him into the picture too?
Again, can't wait for your next chappie. I'm already excited.
Wish me luck on my quiz tomorrow. It's 1:15 a.m. and I'm out :D
~Ria b29;
Date: 01/17/08 11:56 pm Title: Chapter 4: Aftermath
“Oh, it’s Bring Your Daughter To Work Day.”
I love Tomi. So cute and adorable. and ALWAYS buying his wonderful daughter some jewelry. I'm glad that she gets to take care of this bozo.
I'm already confused about Gustav, but hopefully you didn't make him into a badguy. That'd just make me sad.
omg, just one more chappie then I can study. That'd probably the only brightside because it's getting really late here. 12:56 a.m..... and I'm already exhausted.
see you in a bit
~Ria b29;
Date: 01/17/08 11:07 pm Title: Chapter 3: We Are Deadly Serious
“Say one more thing about your daddy and I’m going to strangle you.” Corrine smiled.
“Try me and I’ll break your motherfucking arm.”
Have I mentioned that I lb29;ve Corrine.... oh yeah.... umm.. *cough* about that studying..... ^.^ I couldn't help it ^//^ Curiosity got the better of me. But anyway, wtf happened to those asses. Don't tell me that they just left. Tomi killed them didn't he? ... oh God please say yes.
Something seems deadly off though. I don't think they're in the clear yet. I can't wait to see what happens next.
~Ria b29;
Date: 01/17/08 10:24 pm Title: Chapter 2: Running Errands
ACH MEIN GOTT. Okay I know I lied. But how the hell am I supposed to study Spanish when this story is on my mind. This one foreal though. I'm going to go study right now. It's 11:20 and I have to be up at school really early (I've got an important meeting at my college)
Corrine is such a kickass. I love the way she knocked that one guy out. But dammit....what the hell. Why is Bill not armed. EVERYTHING is a weapon when you do kill missions. A pen, his glasses, his nails, omg his LOOKS, he could so seduce one of the people... oh, and his pointy boots.. if he's wearing them ^-^
Anyway anyway, I'll be back later. I HAVE to finish studying. I have two sections to cover. That's all.
~Ria b29;
Date: 01/17/08 10:03 pm Title: Chapter 1: A Day In The Life
Tom looked at Corrine pick at her food and sigh. “What’s wrong?” He asked, frowning. “Are you not hungry?”
“Not really.” She said, scooting the steak around her plate. “And I don’t think I like steak.”
“Weird. You’re not my kid.”
lol. Tom is so funny. So Corrine belonged to David? David as in David JOST? What did Bill and Tom do? Kill the poor guy? Or was he like some kind of badass assassin who was killed on a mission. Oh, and before YOU ask, I wanted to ask, are you a fan of Naruto? B/c I have something somewhat similar in my story going on that you are putting in yours. And my inspiration is Naruto ^-^
Another good chapter. Can't wait to read chapter 3.... like literally. I can't read it now. I really have to study for my Quiz tomorrow. But that shouldn't take long....
I'll get to it asap. btw, Texas is where I live. And it's 11:05 p.m. ..... be back in a jip
~Ria b29;