Date: 06/16/09 08:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh I see. Well take your time then. I have a feeling this will turn out into a wonderful series.
Author's Response: thank you. i hope it does too
Date: 06/03/09 10:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
*frowns* slice of life I didn't want to see. Well written, sounds like a poem. Why did we kill Bill?
Author's Response: aww sorry. yeah i thought id kinda write some poem-like stories? if that makes any sense. I really didn't intend to kill bill in the story, but i guess that bill, in alot of stories, is the main person that we want to kill. don't know why though. but i took in alot of thought when writing this and you know bill is kind of the baby of the twins and i guess i just thought that it would be a little more tragic if we did bill instead of tom.
Date: 06/03/09 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved The Crow. Brandon Lee did a wonderful job in that movie. And this was a wonderful little diddy to accompany it.
Author's Response: i know me too. i was watching the crow when i thought of this so i just found the quotes and thought that they really fit the story.
Date: 06/03/09 05:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was intriguing but it seemed a bit rushed to me. You could have fleshed out your story a bit more. While reading it everything kept moving so quickly that I had no time to register the emotions I should be getting from it.
The idea behind this though is relly promising. I'd be interested in reading the rest of it.
Good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Yeah i know, i kind of have a problem with rushing things and im still learning to slow things down. so im taking time now to think of new things for this series so it wont be so rushed.
Date: 06/02/09 12:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This just made me depressed - I feel sorry for all of them.
Author's Response: I know, i was a litte depressed as well when i wrote this.
Date: 06/02/09 12:20 am Title: Chapter 1
...Her daddy and her best friend laying there silent and lifeless... - that is everything a little girl should NEVER be forced to see *sniff sniff
*please do continue.. (so that i may curse those monsters who did that to dear Bill) T__T
Author's Response: Thank you. I know, it's horrible. sorry bill had to die though. haha, yes, i will continue
Date: 06/01/09 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
Intriguing beginning :)
Author's Response: lol. thank you! :]
Date: 05/30/09 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
*Sniffs* Aw. Poor Anna and Tom. Short and beautiful, I must say. The quotes at the beginning and ending were perfect, also. I'm curious to see what else is in the series! Good job and good luck in the challenge! :DD
Author's Response: sad i know. thank you. ill be updating soon. im writing another story right now aswell. Thanks, i didn't win, but i'm proud of myself and this story.
Date: 05/30/09 01:11 am Title: Chapter 1
love it!! can't wait to see where else you'll take this series. :)
Author's Response: thank you. me either. keep reading, more to come soon
Date: 05/29/09 08:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ohhh i really liked this too! I can't wait to read the others in the series. This was good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: yay! thank you. glad you liked it.