Date: 07/31/10 07:20 am Title: Chapter 1
Daawww! I really liked this. Very sweet and cute.
Found myself quite happy that Bill showed up at the end. :]
Date: 07/02/09 11:13 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow, that was a very sweet het :) I'm not sure why I like it so much, so we'll just chalk it up for being nicely written :) the ending was so sweet though :)
And without saying a word, our hands joined together my stranger, Bill, and I got off together. Our backs turned to the one thing that held us together as we headed into new territory with a bond growing stronger with each passing second.
hehehe *grins* that was great :)
Author's Response: :D thank you very much! It means a lot since I very rarely write het...and also because I love being flattered =^.^=
Date: 06/13/09 09:28 am Title: Chapter 1
AU MIEN GOTT I LOVED IT!
Such a good job.
It was very very good.
:D
Author's Response: Thanks very much!
Date: 06/05/09 09:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Believe it or not, I can almost relate to your female character. There's a special someone I crave seeing everyday, and when he doesn't come around, I get panicky. So, I know how she felt when she didn't see her stranger.
I love that you didn't give too much detail at the end. I quite enjoy leaving my readers with a hint that something could happen but usually let them imagine whatever they'd like the ending to be, so I appreciate others who do the same. :)
Good luck with the challenge!
Date: 06/05/09 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really cute, and a sweet and hopeful note to end my reading of the challenge fics! Very sweet.
Date: 06/04/09 02:25 pm Title: Chapter 1
...My name is Bill... - *faints... lucky, lucky girl ^__^
*this is sweet...sad, but sweet *sighs
Date: 06/02/09 03:14 am Title: Chapter 1
You write het well. I would LOVE too see where this goes, it seems like it could have a long way to go.
Date: 06/01/09 11:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was extreemly well written. Whith a relateable female! You did a really god job if you narmally write slash! You defanitely have a future in this genre if you would choose that path.
-Jane
(PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE choose that path!!!)
Date: 06/01/09 07:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yea a decent OFC…I hate the unsexed sad little 14 year old self expression of herself in her OFC character. Thanks for not doing that!
One day, my feelings had been so overwhelming that I had blatantly stared at him without realizing it until it was to late. - *snorts*
From then on, when we caught each others glances we would flash a smile before turning the other way out of bashfulness. – awh ok that’s way cute!!!
Sadly though, like all good things it came to an end. – Nooooooooooooooo make him come back!
Awh it’s sweet all about the power of love and all soppy and mushy at the end. Well done!
Date: 05/29/09 09:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
hey. my friend told me to read this and it's the last story out of 5 that i have. i thought it was okay for a first time het writer. the way you write made everything more bareable. so congrats and thanks for the read.
Date: 05/29/09 12:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like the mood you set with the details, it made it a lot more realistic. Love really makes you blind when you try to rationalize, especially if you're the type, like the ofc, that likes to dissect everything. It gets frustrating when things aren't what you expect them to be. This story was really cute. But, why did Bill stop getting subway? I think its a good thing that you didn't say, though, because it is from the ofc's point of view and she wouldn't know. Also, just the very little dialog at the end fit the story well. I think it would be a little off if she asked him where he had gone. Anyway, I would like to think that it was Fate that got her fired and that Bill got on the subway again on the last day she would be on there. lol. I really liked this story. Good job on your first time writing het:D and good luck with the challenge.
Date: 05/29/09 10:51 am Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading this. It was really sweet. At times I had the feeling that you were going a bit overboard with it but somehow you managed to keep a balance in the end. The last scene put me a bit off cause imagining them walking hand in hand while they had just met, seemed a bit improbable to me and so it made it less believable. But the last line saved the day.
But you did great for this being your first het story.
Good luck with the challenge!
Date: 05/28/09 10:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is very sweet. By the way, I was listening to "Monsoon" while reading it and it somehow fit perfectly -- great visuals.
Date: 05/28/09 05:54 am Title: Chapter 1
I think it's absolutely adorable!. You described things very well, too!. Great job, honey.:).
Date: 05/27/09 03:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. Great visuals :)
Date: 05/26/09 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very sweet. Very, like, mysterious, almost. They met on a bus/ subway car, and they developed a small friendship, and then there was more. I liked.
Date: 05/26/09 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
awe, that was adorable. :)