Date: 11/08/10 03:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
I like it, heartbreaking, every girls "nightmare" and somehow you make the text very raw. Anyhow, all I can say is that I really, really liked this text and I enjoyed reading it ;)
Hugs//NikkiDiary
Date: 08/19/10 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! That was completely unexpected and I loved it!
Date: 06/12/09 12:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
i love this! and the
last line is my favourite
bit :) x
Date: 06/11/09 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
the ending was and wasn't a surprise to me for an odd reason. Great short story! Loved the description, loved everything.
Date: 06/05/09 02:47 am Title: Chapter 1
Bill as the heartbreaker. I like it. :) Very good job.
Date: 06/04/09 03:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
so sad..
pity 4 that girl..
ya think this is the real bill??
*cries*
Date: 06/01/09 06:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
It was a sad parallel! Nicely done!
Date: 06/01/09 11:07 am Title: Chapter 1
...He was just waiting for the right time to break her heart... - *cringes
Date: 06/01/09 09:38 am Title: Chapter 1
Aww :( I feel sorry for the both of them. I couldn't see Bill like this in real life, but it was believeable here. Nicely done :)
Date: 06/01/09 03:25 am Title: Chapter 1
Aww what a sad ending. :( Good story, though. :)
Date: 05/30/09 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Well, I must say for a first time het fic this was very impressive. Short. Sharp. amazing. It's great to see someone writing Bill this way and not the usual cutsey kind of guy. It has a great impact for such little words. Well done! :D
Date: 05/29/09 12:43 pm Title: Chapter 1
i absolutley adore this story
it's so beautifully written
xx
Date: 05/29/09 11:56 am Title: Chapter 1
This had me at a loss for words for a bit. lol. If I ever picture Bill with a girl, thats how I picture it...That she loves him and he doesn't love her the same way, lol. Tom is usually the one in similar situations and I like that it's Bill for a change. I think you did an amazing job your first time writing het(: Oh, and the last line is perfect:D I should probably say something else about it, but I don't know what, lol. After I read that line, the story just screamed 'perfect':D
Date: 05/29/09 09:08 am Title: Chapter 1
I am mostly a het reader so seeing Bill in this one described as a "heartbreaker" is a refreshing change.
You did well I think. The whole thing with all these differences between them worked quite well. There was something dramatic in the story and that I also liked. Loved the last line, it captured the essence of the story.
Good luck with the challenge!
Date: 05/28/09 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awesome and even more impressive considering this is your first try at het. I hope you continue this!!!
Date: 05/28/09 10:09 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ouch....that broke my heart a lil...
Date: 05/28/09 12:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
this is awesome :] if it had no names in I'd assume it to be tom, so it being Bill is sort of a refreshing change from Tom being playboy-heartbreaker and Bill being totally-in-love-all-the-time, so yay for you :]
Date: 05/28/09 08:52 am Title: Chapter 1
i liked the comparision. Often het is lovey dovey with the Tokio-boy loving the girl completely etc... but this was more dramatic in its simplicity, it's difference. I liked it; short and concise but hard hitting
Date: 05/28/09 12:10 am Title: Chapter 1
Ohhh that was great.
Date: 05/27/09 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh myyy :]
lol
i liked thiss :]]
are all the authors purposely anonymous?