Date: 05/30/09 10:18 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Bedroom
Oh no!!!!!!
Not Georg!? *sniff*... he was my favorite ... *sniffsniff*
Well, *wipes eyes* it was still a good chapter.
Lol, I'm still excited to see moooore =]]]
Author's Response: My, you got over your sadness quick. ;) Thanks for your review! :D More to come soon. :)
Date: 05/30/09 09:20 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Bedroom
Oh my... that's so freaking sad... :( Gusti shouldn't have gone off alone! Really though this is amazing... i get so freaked out every time I read it so keep it up... so much love
Author's Response: Thanks so much for all the compliments! :D I'll do my best to keep it good! :)
Date: 05/30/09 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Bedroom
i love tis god damn sory ha ha hay will gustav die?
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D Will Gustav die...? I'll think about it. :)
Date: 05/30/09 09:16 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Bedroom
Ahhhh GEORGE!!!! :( I'm so sad sniff sniff. Um hi Gustav Geroge was alone when this happened to him would you really stay in a room by yourself?! Oh yeah, I keep forgetting this is horror we're talking about. Supidity is inevitable. Anyhow... I have a bad feeling about this. he he he....
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D It made me laugh. XD It's true; Gustav is a bit stupid for going off on his own. Bill and Tom are the smart ones... perhaps... ;)
Date: 05/30/09 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 4 - Bedroom
omg, please just let it be like a nightmare of one of them, i dont want georg to really be dead
Author's Response: Aww, I'm sorry, but it's true... :( Thanks for your review though. :) I hope you'll keep reading!
Date: 05/29/09 09:51 am Title: Chapter 1 - Hotel
But I need to show my support and root for the guys like you root for mine! I will face my fear AND CONTINUE READING!! *vows*
Author's Response: Yeyyy good good! :D Thanks! More to come soon. :)
Date: 05/29/09 09:47 am Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
CRAP!! STOP ASKING QUESTIONS AND SAVE GEORG FROM THE PSYCHO DOLLS!! Ah screw it *rips shirt off to reveal big S* IM COMING GEORGIE!! Lol i LOVE it! Gustav is always so calm!
Author's Response: Yeyy Super-Miki to the rescue :D Thanks for your review! I'm glad you love it! :)
Date: 05/29/09 08:36 am Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! I DON'T LIKE THIS! *covers eyes*
Author's Response: Haha! XD Well, you could always stop reading... :P Thanks for the review! :D
Date: 05/28/09 06:33 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
Oooo!!! Gosh, dolls that might kill people now! Or tell people to kill people...creepy! let me tell you, if I was there, I would book it out already :) Georg is gone, big uh-oh.... omg! I have no idea what you did, but the dialouge was so much better :) Your trying paid off very well :) lol
“I’m not going in there! It was your brilliant idea to go check out that scream, now you go in and see how he is doing.”
Somehow that sounds just like Tom :) And now we get to find out what happened to Georg right? Maybe? Or will that stay a mystery for a chapter or two? Sure hope not, I want to know... :)
Author's Response: Really? It was better? :D Woo hoo! :D But shit, now I don't know what I did either. XD I hope I'll keep my mojo on that. :P I just tried to keep it more 'casual'... *shrugs* Ahh I dunno! XD Thanks for the compliment on what Tom said as well! And yup, in the next chapter you'll find out where Georg is. :)
Date: 05/28/09 06:05 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
Aww man! I would leave right then. But of course they won't. It's supposed to be scary! EEeep! Poor George.
Author's Response: Haha! Yeah, they won't leave! It's a horror story after all. :P Thanks for your review! :D
Date: 05/28/09 03:39 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
omg, i love this story, its really creepy, i hope u update soon, im going to track it
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D And thanks for tracking it. I promise I will update tomorrow or the day after! :)
Date: 05/28/09 03:36 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
Holy crap you're the master of evil cliffhangers arent you now... Really though, this is so creepy! I freaking love it.. it is REALLY hard to freak me out but you just had to bring in dolls and children didn't you!!! Ooh I love you for this
Author's Response: Hahaha! XD Your review made me LOL. Thanks! :D I like ending with cliffhangers, so you can expect more! :P
Date: 05/28/09 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
the history of the hotel was interesting =]
I'm still very intrigued in this story xD Good job
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review and your compliments! :D
Date: 05/28/09 02:20 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
if georg is dead i swear to god lol... not cool hhaaha
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D To your comment I can only say: Hum... :$
Date: 05/28/09 01:32 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
OH OH OH OH OH OH OH, WHERE'S GEORG???? DON'T LIKE HIM BE A BLOODY MESS!!!!!! This was an excellant chappie, waiting for more.
Author's Response: Thanks BIBFTY! :D I think you know what happened to Georg, don't you... ;)
Date: 05/28/09 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 3 - Dining room
that gave me the creeps!-shudders-
OH NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Geooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrgggggggggg!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D I'm glad it creeped you out... :P
Date: 05/26/09 05:54 am Title: Chapter 2 - Bathroom
OOOOOO who screamed???? This is great waiting for more please
Author's Response: Thanks for your review, BIBFTY!! :D I'm glad you like it. :) More to come soon!
Date: 05/26/09 01:52 am Title: Chapter 2 - Bathroom
okay so i think im going to shit my pants and have nightmares but ive been waiting for a good horror fic!!!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! :D I'm glad you think it's good! I hope the rest will live up to your expectations. :)
Date: 05/25/09 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Bathroom
MORE MORE I NEED MOOORE THIS STORY IS GOD I LOVE IT MORE ICH LIEBE DICH
Author's Response: Haha! Thanks for your review! :D I'm glad you like it! More soon. :)
Date: 05/25/09 04:57 pm Title: Chapter 2 - Bathroom
CLIFFY!!! Damn girl, why did you have to just leave it there?! Gosh, creepy doll face, I don't like dolls, especially those porcelin ones, they look so real and creepy and *shiver*
And some of them were blue and yellow. My bathroom is peach, Bill. There is nothing blue or yellow.
That had to be your best peice of dialouge right there :) Yes, I have to sort of agree with you, you're dialouge it a little choppy or something, but its okay lol, I do that too so I can't be one to judge :) I think maybe you're writing it like its still descriptive
I also noticed the shower didn’t wash them away
That was the one line I noticed, and I think (I'm not a professional writer or anything so you can completely ignore this because I could be freaky wrong) its because of the "I also noticed" which seemed to make it choppy. Maybe if you just said, "And the shower wasn't washing them away."? Because it is sort of implide that this is something else that Tom noticed, but idk...
But wow, that one line with the peach and blue just was like Oooo, shivers... :) Gosh, screaming at the end, maybe its one of the g's? And then we get to get them to interact too!? :) hehehe, love to see where this goes, and I'm just hoping they'll make it out okay :)
Author's Response: Wow long review! Thanks so much! :D Thanks for the compliments, first of all! I'm glad you liked so many things, and I'm glad it actually made you scared a bit! :D *evil laugh* Also, thanks for the tips. I guess the dialogue is too much 'written' rather than 'spoken', if you know what I mean. Like you said: it's too much like a description. I'll try to keep it simpler in the next chapters! I hope you'll review again to let me know how I'm doing! :D