Date: 05/27/09 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 2: Wardrobe Combat
How about A, B, & C? I would like to know all of those things.
Author's Response: Oh, I'll try to fit them all in soon, promise. :)
Date: 05/27/09 03:26 pm Title: Chapter 2: Wardrobe Combat
hmmm...I never liked choicing how the story goes... lol, so that's up to you :) lol :) wow, lots of dialouge in this chapter, and the way Hayley is acting, she doesn't seem all that different than how you've made Tom out to be, but that could just be. They seemed nice opposites in the beginning, but now they seem to overlap a little :)
“The most loving parents and relatives commit murder with smiles on their faces. They force us to destroy the person we really are: a subtle kind of murder.”
lol, I love how you find the best quotes for Hayley to spew off :) and all this makes only more questions about everything :)
Author's Response: Some parts of Hayley and Tom are very alike so there is naturally soe overlapping but they are more different than alike, if that makes any sense. lol I am a collecter of quotes so it isn't hard for me to find good ones for her. Glad you like it. :)
Date: 05/27/09 11:58 am Title: Chapter 2: Wardrobe Combat
A) Please :)
Lol, it's so funny when Tom and Hayley fight xD
Author's Response: I think a (tiny) bit of their bickering is inspired by my best friend and her boyfriend. They bicker like mad. Glad you like it. :)
Date: 05/27/09 05:05 am Title: Chapter 2: Wardrobe Combat
i want to know them all!!
love your story!!
Author's Response: Glad you like it. :)
Date: 05/26/09 04:50 am Title: Chapter 1: Dramatics And Doubt
very interesting. I really like Hayley's character especially her sarcasm and bitterness towards Tom. Can't wait to read the next chapter. :]
Author's Response: Next chapter is almost done. :)
Date: 05/21/09 09:42 pm Title: Chapter 1: Dramatics And Doubt
lol, I liked this one :) and even though I knew the pairing was Tom and Hayley, it was still sort of surprising. Lol, talk about being out of it :) Anyway, I liked this chapter, and I absolutly adore the things with the quotes, I love quotes :) hehehe, Tom seems to be pretty much spot on, and I like how you don't have him like falling to his knees or something to get at Hayley. Lol, I'm loving her sister even more, because she is just so...No idea what the word is, but I'm loving her charactor. One thing I noticed was
“And dress me like a posy apocalyptic ballerina on top of that.”
I think it is suppose to be post, not posy, lol :) Poor Gusti, finds the sister to be weird, and overbearing :) when you mentioned Hayley could cook, I just automatically had this flash of Tom trying to help her, like in the past :) it was cute, lol, I'm pathetic :) love this, and update soon :) hehehe, the to do list, I think I'm liking it. So do we get to hear about them going to the concert? Or will you skip that? :)
Author's Response: Yeah, Tom is SO not begging for Hayley back. There is a lot of....tension there, shall we say. lol Past issue, past drama. Ah, life. Such wonders. lolrnrnAs for Jade you could call her peculiar, annoying, meddling, boisterous, daunting, calculating....and probably many more things. rnrnFixed the typo, thanks. :)rnrnYes, poor Gusti. Jade is a bit overbearing. And Tom helping Hayley would be cute and pathetic at the same time because he can't cook. She's probably kick him out of the kitchen. lol There will be a brief mention of the actually concert but nothing huge. :)
Date: 05/21/09 08:09 pm Title: Chapter 1: Dramatics And Doubt
Oh, I hate Jade D:
Author's Response: Awww. Yeah, Jade can be a pain. :)
Date: 05/21/09 06:40 pm Title: Chapter 1: Dramatics And Doubt
Why did Tom break up with her?
Author's Response: There was actually more than one reason. All of which will be revealed as the story goes on.
Date: 05/19/09 08:35 pm Title: Prologue: Tomb Of Love
Hehehe, let me just say I love the actual thing much more than the summery, lol, shoot me, but it is the truth. The summery is like all serious, and dark, evil, going to kill someone, but then you have this fun light little prolouge that I'm laughing through and thinking, yeah, sisters are just like that :) So I have to say I thought I wouldn't like to read this, but actually I was wrong, and I'm loving it so far :) Just one thing I noticed, spelling wise, was...
"So now wearing that.”
I think its suppose to be not, but other than that I didn't really see anything :)
Hayley seems like a smart kind of girl, who doesn't get out all that often, while Jade seems like a party girl :) correct me there if I'm wrong. Just make sure Hayley doesn't turn into a Mary Sue, and keep in mind opposites can attract :)
The whole actual story had me giggling, but the last line, I was just cracking up, because idk, life seems to be taking a turn for the worse right now for her, and I found that halirous :)
So I think this was a nice way you started it all off, capturing their personalities, and sort of showing you a part of the problem :) Just don't want to read all dialogue the whole story though, so maybe more detail when they end up going to the concert? lol, sorry that my thoughts are so jumpy...:) anyway :) love it :)
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the spelling issue. No matter how many times you read something you can almost never figure out if everything is right, so thanks. :)rnrnYou are right about the sister's personalities. 100% Jade just likes to have fun and go wild and Hayley...doesn't. lol Trust me though, Hayley is anything but perfect and will remain that way throughout- for the most part. I can't really give away anything. And yes, life seems to hate Hayley right now. She is the proverbial punching bag. And dialogue is always fun at the beginning but I agree, descriptions would be a good idea for later on.rnrnGlad you like it. :)
Date: 05/19/09 07:22 pm Title: Prologue: Tomb Of Love
:) I like it~
Author's Response: Glad you like it. :)
Date: 05/19/09 07:06 pm Title: Prologue: Tomb Of Love
Looks good so far, please post more. :)
Author's Response: Glad you like it. :)
Date: 05/19/09 05:50 pm Title: Prologue: Tomb Of Love
Interesting...
Author's Response: Don't know if that's a good thing or a bad thing, but whatever. lol