Reviewer: killingallthatisreal Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/09 08:41 pm Title: Part One: Meeting - Chapter Four: A Night Out Of Characters

sexy sexy time!!! lol. love billa in that outfit. ^_^ d:)

Author's Response: Thanks. I like him in it too

Reviewer: killingallthatisreal Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/09 07:26 pm Title: Part One: Meeting - Chapter Two: Meeting Up

uh oh!!!! lol i am likin this.

Reviewer: Lady Tiadalma Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/09 05:13 pm Title: Part Three: Bonding - Chapter Eleven: Putting The Past Behind You

My eyes are kinda burning now. Thanks. I don't go for that sort of thing personally, but thinking about it is a completely different ballgame. Nicely done. In fact, it was SO WELL DONE, it makes me wonder how you were able to write it SO WELL. Hmm, I just don't know...

Author's Response: XD Thanks. You're review made me feel better. Some didn't find it as good, so your review made my confidence return a little. Thanks.

Reviewer: Tears_of_trees Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/09 09:59 am Title: Part Three: Bonding - Chapter Eleven: Putting The Past Behind You

I loved the final shirt scene I have to say n_n it was so adorable. lol, Tom might be a little perv, but then he's a boy, he's allowed to be. Okay, whisper secret time... (I never really like it when they're 'beating' each other up during sex...) *darts away* there I said it. lol, so I kind of skimmed over that part... sorry, about that, just never sat right with me, even though I do read it...kind of...but not really...more of skim…

I do like Tanja's story as a mother who lost a child, I can see her reacting this way, not particularly caring where the child came from, just so that she'd have a child, a baby none the less, who would grow up not knowing any difference. So yeah n_n

He just kept on wiggling and dancing until finally Tom threw him off.

lol, I found that greatly amusing though. I can totally see Bill forgetting about that, and just kind of keep dancing around. So yeah, this was the most amusing sentence for me n_n

He couldn't win a fight when his opponents are two love struck boys, and a woman who spends her free time reading cheap romance novels.

and I loved that line too n_n cheap romance novels can be quite horrid though if you pick up the wrong one...anyway, yeah, lol. love struck boys, which I find hilarious using that phrase to just boys (don't hurt me, I know it sounds prejudice and I'm not, swear.) but I just always seem to think of love struck teenagers, and well, boys, and yeah, then the cheap romance novels part, and I was laughing.

Author's Response: *Whispers back* It's ok, I don't mind. *In normal voice* I'm glad you liked Tanja's story. I like her character. Cheap romance novels can be terrible, but some aren't all that bad. I'm glad you got some good laughs in there XD

Reviewer: parallelheartz Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/20/09 05:25 am Title: Part Three: Bonding - Chapter Eleven: Putting The Past Behind You

um, *blinks at the screen*

it's not a good um nor a good pause that's happening here.

I'm sure your readers will love the sex scene that you provided here, but it kind of ruined the story for me.

now i like bondage and bdsm in a story, but only when it applies to the characters and the storyline.

I feel like this scene that's supposed to show their kinky sides, just showed that you have an inability to write with continuity for your characters personalities.

i don't mind OOC characters, but when your own characters deviate from the molding that you've given them, it makes your writing look poor.

anyways, I just wanted to let you know my own views on it, even if no one else may share them.

I hope you see this for what it is: constructive criticism, and that you grow as an author from it.

Author's Response: *Nods* Ok thank you. I really appreciate you took the time to actually say something instead of being all " . . .*leaves page*"

Reviewer: DaveyDel1Cious Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/19/09 10:58 pm Title: Part Three: Bonding - Chapter Eleven: Putting The Past Behind You

Shit, I love it when Tom's the kinky one. Damn!

Author's Response: XD So do I!

Reviewer: Tears_of_trees Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/14/09 09:08 am Title: Part Two: Realization - Chapter Ten: Meeting The Other Woman

Oooo, I want to know where it all begins :) lol, even though I think you've told us a good chunk of the story, I'm thinking there may be more?

Although, instead of being on the cushion, he was in Tom's lap.

hehehe, awww :) that seems too cute n_n and that Jorg is accepting of it.

She shut it quickly, catching sight of a shirtless Bill straddling her son.

You make it hard on all the mothers here, lol. They're always catching the two doing something they probably shouldn't be caught doing :)

Jorg's first thought was 'circus freak' but more in an affectionate way, as opposed to a cruel way.

See, he does seems accepting-ish. I mean, you can call someone a circus freak in a loving way, and besides, he didn't say it aloud, so like double the points! My friend calls me a hoe (A garden tool yea!!) all the time, but it's a loving way. lol, if that makes any sense. I saw a few more spelling mistakes than normal, just like a lost letter here or there, but I'm not really complaining :) got another chapter :)

Simone cupped their cheeks that weren't touching and gave them a smile before leaving. She had gotten the hint.

Woot, woot!! Simone! hehehe, picking up on all the subtle (or not so subtle) hints the boys are giving off :) lol... she's so accepting... :)

Author's Response: I think I have told most of the story. I do like to make it hard on the mothers XD I get called a circus freak all the time, and I call one of my best friend's SkankFace XD And I don't think my chapter was too bad considering it was totally unbeta'd. It's probably a good idea she does pick up on the hints XD

Reviewer: yorutya Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/13/09 09:03 pm Title: Part Two: Realization - Chapter Ten: Meeting The Other Woman

plzplzplzplzp update soooonnn...thx sososo much=]=]

Reviewer: Lady Tiadalma Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/13/09 02:30 pm Title: Part Two: Realization - Chapter Ten: Meeting The Other Woman

Family talks are never a good thing, in my experience. But we'll see what happens.
I'll bet Jorg and Tanja are going to be sickly sweet to Bill and even Tom, but I just can't get over the fact that Jorg ripped his family apart that way! He's a loser, no matter how successful he is.
At least Simone seems coll enough about everything.

Author's Response: They aren't a good thing *shudders at memories*. I agree, Jorg is a loser.

Reviewer: faerylxjae89 Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/13/09 02:10 pm Title: Part Two: Realization - Chapter Ten: Meeting The Other Woman

xD thats all ya get XD <-- is those XD

Author's Response: I like those XD