Honestly I'm terrible with first person myself and you did much better than I probably could have. And there were no tense problems in this chapter.

I'm curious to see how this will all work out between Tom and the cat, whom I won't yet assume is Bill, but assuming that he is, then I wonder if he'll take a human form. Since he doesn't seem to be any normal cat [well of course he isn't] and the fantasy genre is there for a reason, I suppose there's a possibility. Well, I'm just thinking out loud, I suppose I'll find out with another chapter or few.

Tom's definitely getting attached to the cat already. I can't wait to see how it progresses from here.

I have no idea what compelled me to read this, because to be honest from the summary I figured that there were so many ways an author could write this type of story wrong, but I'm actually rather enjoying it. The point of view works nicely and the descriptions are excellent. The only criticism I have is about the random tense changes you have throughout.

And now, I will stay with him because he lets me sleep on comfortable feather pillows.

I consider myself lucky to be in such a place at all.

I understand that since the cat is the narrator, he's telling the story during the present time while all the events are in the past, but changing tenses like that tends to make things seem disconnected.

Otherwise, you're doing a very good job with this, and I hope that you continue it. A very original idea. :)

Author's Response: Tense in first person is one of the things I have the most trouble with. That's why I tend to stay away from first person in general. Thanks for pointing those out. I rewrote that section once and cleaned it up but I'll probably go back and fix it again. I'm working on revising the second chapter, so keep an eye out for it :) I appreciate the review, by the way.