Date: 05/31/09 11:15 pm Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
I think Sasha's really cute, but his way of speaking is pretty annoying. I think you should tone it down just a little.
It's sad that Bill would feel like he had to offer himself to pay someone back.
Author's Response: Thank you. I appreciate the feedback. I just don't want to make Sasha twenty sounding, like a lot of people do when writing. I'm not entirely sure how to go about it in another way, you know?
Date: 05/31/09 07:57 pm Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
pzlzpl update sooon thx=]
Date: 05/31/09 01:59 pm Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Awesome story. Sasha is such an adorable character that moved me to tears right from the first chapter. I can't wait to see how the story develops!
Author's Response: I'm so amazed to hear how many people get moved by Sasha. Thanks so much for reading this, and reviewing!
Date: 05/31/09 11:57 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
it was nice to hear about Geo and Sasha for a change.
& Connor's just the cutest thing. ^^
Author's Response: XD Yay for Connor. I thought he was cute too. I'm glad you liked the shift in focus. I don't want little Sasha to be forgotten about. He's too cute for that
Date: 05/31/09 10:06 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
lol, Georg mentally might be his age... :) Hmmm, what were you so worried about with this? That it doesn't really have Tom in it? I think it was a nice way to sort of end with Bill, and what he thinks Georg might want in return :)
It was Tom. Tom hated him, and he hated Sasha more
That line broke my heart, I can't think of anyone hating Sasha, the guy is so adorable :) lol, the little things with cotties in there was a nice little add on thing, it sort of shows us the age Sasha is at more :) And that he doesn't act like he's twenty like some people tend to make children.
I don't have any money, but I can do other things.
That line was sad to read too, that Bill can't really accept people doing things for free (at least I think that is sort of what you are getting at, I could be wrong) and that he feels like he has to repay them. I wonder if he'll feel that way when he moves in with Tom...And what Tom will think of him if he does...
Are we going to hear more about the shop? or is that something like in the past? and was more of an opening to getting Sasha to find Tom and Georg and get Bill...? Hehehehe, I can totally see Bill minding the shop and just bustling around :) Gosh, still thinking about how Sasha is going to be when he finds out his brother is going to be leaving him...lol, hoping it won't be that bad, he has GEORG!!! :) gotta love him :)
Author's Response: Actually, my biggest concern was that Emma would seem too Mary Sue-ish. That's my fear with all my OFC's that have a role, as opposed to a nurse saying two lines, or someone's mother. I'm trying really hard to keep Sasha his age. I know what you mean about people making kids older. You were right about Bill not being able to accept free things. And WOW! The ideas that came to me from the line about Tom . . . .*taps fingers together* As for the shop - I totally forgot about it XD But yeah, it'll come up again. Thank you for such long reviews! I freaking LOVE them!
Date: 05/31/09 06:57 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
YAY!!!!! I want more about BILLA not George :P
Author's Response: There will be plenty of Bill, trust me. But we can't forget the little kid that pretty much started it all, and if said kid happens to be around Geo...
Date: 05/31/09 06:44 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
mm interesting new side of Bill. Sasha is so cute and georg seems to be the wise one in this xd
Can't wait for the next chapter and to see Tom again!!
Author's Response: Geo's the wise one *giggles* nice. Thanks for the review!
Date: 05/31/09 04:25 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
XD this was cute I like the cooties part it was like so cute.XDDD and yay for Sasha making friends and Bill is naughty naughty boy...
Author's Response: *giggles* You like cooties. *cough* sorry, had to say that XD
Date: 05/31/09 04:21 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Awww.... Poor Billa. I LOVE THIS STORY! Please update soon :)
Author's Response: It is poor Bill. He's been through a lot. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 05/31/09 02:07 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
I loved this fic *-*
wanna read the next chap :D
um it's 2 am xD I'm sleepy, but I actually loved it ;D
byeee =D
.nekito.
Author's Response: Yay thanks. And sorry, next chapter hasn't even been thought about yet XD
Date: 05/31/09 01:29 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Oh I read all of the other chapters and I nearly cried at some of them.
Great work on this story, I'm hooked!
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I can't believe people are enjoying this so much.
Date: 05/31/09 01:12 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Aaaaaaaaaawwww...
Georg with kids is just plain cute. CUTE!!XD The way Sasha speaks too.. Aaww.. Yeah, the little boy needs friends his age and let him have fun like normal kids...
I believe you did mention Bill was doing something like prostitution before..-___- He doesn't have to do anything. Georg's just an angel. Lol.. and maybe he'll soften up Tom once he starts living with him.. Heeeee...XD
Author's Response: You think that's cute....just wait til Geo introduces Sasha to superheroes like Batman and stuff. I did mention prostitution a bit, I'm glad you remembered XD
Date: 05/31/09 12:02 am Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Thats so funny. I remember the same things happening when I was in school too. I hated boys then too, but Not so much now. Anyway.... that was cute.
Author's Response: I know! They totally chased me around and tried to wipe their cooties in my hair! but yeah, glad you liked it
Date: 05/30/09 11:59 pm Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Geo does act sasha's age!!!LOL
i'm pretty sure he's the same age as sasha and connor inside!but then again who isn't a kid deep inside right???
Thanks for the update=D
i hope you update soon again!!
Author's Response: I act that age too sometimes . . . I still make car noises when we turn corners XD
Date: 05/30/09 11:49 pm Title: Of Parks And Girl Cooties
Oh, the dreaded cooties xD
*lol* It was kinda random, with Bill asking if he would get someone sick if he slept with them. And vaguely offering payment to Georg in sexual favors? Bill hasn't been prostituting, has he? -_-
Anyhoo, great chapter! :D Sasha is the cutest little thing...
Author's Response: Bill got money to pay for Sasha's food somehow . . . Anyways, yay! I'm SO glad you liked it
Date: 05/27/09 12:47 pm Title: Of Andreas And First Visits
I love this, even if Tom wasn't the friendliest of boys here! And Sasha...god, dear Sasha. I think Georg is such a cutie with him!
Author's Response: Isn't he? XD I'm glad you like it. I like cranky Tom. He's fun that way.
Date: 05/27/09 08:03 am Title: Of Sasha and Georg
Depends on you:-) If Andi had a crush on Bill, it would make the story most difficult, and if on Georg, he is so adorable, deserves a secter admirer;-)
Author's Response: *Wheels are turning in head now* XD
Date: 05/26/09 07:09 pm Title: Of Andreas And First Visits
Awww! Tom can't just leave Bill like that!!! Meanie!!! Ooooooh Bill's got a crush!!!!! I love love love Gay!Andi!! That's so cute that he and Tom can be close like that while sleeping and not be all awkward!!
Yay for me for being reviewer 100!!! WOOT!!! I love this story!! Update soon!!!
Author's Response: *Giggles* Bill does have a crush. Can you imagine how embarrassing that would be? Have your heart racing around that certain someone. . . .and a heart monitor giving it away completely. Except, in Bill's case, Tom is too dumb to get it.
Date: 05/26/09 12:32 am Title: Of Andreas And First Visits
You may come out of hiding. You could thump your head onto your keyboard repeatedly, making a jumble of letters, and I would still read it, because I have faith that there is a reason for every keystroke you make. *glomp*
Author's Response: *blinks* Oh my. . . .You know, I am so tempted to do that now hehe. Thank you though. Makes me feel really good about my writing, even if I don't always like it
Date: 05/25/09 10:04 pm Title: Of Andreas And First Visits
Yeee Update!...
Oh Bill is getting better that's good! and now he has a new friend :D Andreas, he seems like a nice guy ^^ ...
I hope Tom can change his behavior he need to lighten up a little bit...
Update soon please,I will be waiting for more!!
Author's Response: Yeah, Andi's pretty nice. I love how stuffy Tom is. It's kinda funny. But I agree, he does need to lighten up.