Reviewer: Tears_of_trees Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 01:47 pm Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

Ooo, I would love you to describe things more :) I think the reason we all like this so much, (lol or maybe this is jsut me) is because it is an interesting plot idea, and it is so much fun :) I love when people give me things to visualize but then I like to see some things my own way :) But I love the whole idea here :) but damn, I wish the chapters were longer, you always seem to leave me hanging at points where I just want to strangle you for leaving them there :)

Another hour later, the two gay boys were done shopping.

I don't know why, but that line just started cracking me up :) Not sure why, but yes, it did :)

Only Andreas knew more than Tom's lip was done, as he had been there for them all.

I had to reread this sentence a few times, and then when I got it, (at least i think I got it....) I started to laugh again. Mwahahaha, does this mean Tom has got something done in a naughty place? Or is that just me thinking naughty? Except that might be awkward for Andi to be there while Tom got it done... lol, ignore me :)

Ooo, I love that imagery too! except I think I would add hot to that image. "uber rich hot Tom eating Fruit Loops from a plastic bowl" :)

So back to the detail thing, it seems a little like you just sort of breezed over everything to get the story going. So actually, if you wanted to start adding detail, now that Bill is with Tom, there could be a lot of fun interactions and good details. I would gladdly love more details and longer chapters that have details. Before to have a lot of detail it would have been kind of boring (no offense or anything) if you had talked on and on about how Tom was upset that Bill was coming to live with him. I mean there is only so much of that a person can take :) But it's your story, write and tell how ever you want :) I'm just along for the fun ride :) (I get the easy way out, just have to read)

"I never had a choice. It was decided for me."

That broke my little heart. I just can't imagine having my sexuality chosen for me. Poor Bill.. good job Andi, hugging the poor boy :) *squeezes*

Author's Response: XD Aww I'm sorry. I don't intentionally leave you wanting to strangle me. I like going about my day unstrangled. Kind of makes me sad when it happens XD *Rolls on the floor* Only you would think of Tom getting naughty places pierced. You do get the easy way out, for the most part. Though I do appreciate all your feedback. You are awesome. I actually woke up at like 6am with the sexuality chosen for him idea. I pulled out the laptop, wrote it down, then went back to sleep XD Thanks so much for leaving feedback, hun!

Reviewer: thywillbedone Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 09:56 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

This story is perfect just as it is.

Look, Bill's life is shit, but now there's a chance for it to get better. Tom being now a part of Bill's life, well, I think that's gonna change both of them. And I cannot specify how much I adore that Georg took Sasha. That little boy is so adorably cute, I can believe he's related to Bill! LOL

I don't need you to go on and on about details for me to be there, because I've been there since the first chapter.

The fact that I'm still hooked up on the story, you can change it and add more/take out detail and I would still love it.

This is just my opinion and not a rather helpful one, but it's what I really think.

I really want to see how this all turns out, for all of them, because there is a reason they are all in each other's life now.

Sometimes, Angels come to us in very different forms we're not expecting. What we need is an open heart to hear what they are trying to say.

 

Author's Response: *eyes huge* If I find the right place, may I use that last line about the angels? Please? *begs* Oh, and yes, I did find your review helpful XD

Reviewer: bacettina Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 07:34 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

"Hey Justin. You've got a customer" muahauahaaha this cracked me up, I was expecting tom to be shocked like georg had been xD tom is hilarious lol
and why do you say the story is terrible?? it isn't, at all.
and I liked it this way up until now, but I wouldn't mind having a bit more details!

Author's Response: *Laughs* I love Tom. I do. This story was meant to be really sad and serious. Tom changed it accidently. And really, it's Tom. He's was semi shocked, but then he was all "ALRIGHT! *pumps fist*" . . . .Knowing Tom, did you really expect anything different? XD

Reviewer: Billa_Loves_Skittles Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 03:24 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

i wanna know what else tomi has peirced. lol, and poor bill, thinking thats what tomi wants, well he may want it, but it's not what he meant by payment.

Author's Response: Haha you people and your filthy minds. Who's to say Tom pierced anything like that? XD *nods* I feel bad for Bill too. So tragic

Reviewer: Kina Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 03:09 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

I like the fact that there isn't a lot of detail. I mean, I love detailed stories, but for some reason the little detail fits this story perfectly. I wouldn't change a thing.

Oh, and I loved the mental image of Tom eating Fruit Loops from a plastic bowl too. =]

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad I'm doing this right so far. I've never had a story I've done by myself draw so much attention, so it's nervewrecking everytime I post a chapter. To me, that is the greatest image ever.

Reviewer: toho09 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 02:41 am Title: Of Andreas And First Visits

hehe andreas made me giggle idky( i usually not a big fan of andreas) haha:D
love it hun :D

Reviewer: toho09 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 02:29 am Title: Of Sasha and Georg

i just started reading and aww yes Sasha is soo cute
tom is a butt lol

Reviewer: Princess2000204 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 01:32 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

I think you should listen to your beta and stop second guessing yourself!!!

 

Author's Response: XD thanks! I have to say, she agrees with you. I showed her what you said and she was all "told ya. . ." XD

Reviewer: InvisibleTears96 Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 12:48 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

*glomps*I just love this story! It's one my favorites. Keep up the good the work!

P.S There may not be so much detail, but the storyline and how well written it is defiantly makes up for that. No worries!

Author's Response: *is glomped* YAY for you loving this. And thanks for letting me know it's ok without a kagillion details.

Reviewer: Lady Tiadalma Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/14/09 12:36 am Title: Of Malls And Makeovers

Perfection. With or without alot of detail. Sometimes, I personally like to be able to imagine things on my own. After Hot Topic, maybe they went into a Clair's Boutique. I have one in my mall, and it's a store geared mostly toward little girls. There's make up, though, and alot of jewelry, so who knows? I can think they did, though, since you didn't come right out and say they didn't, know what I mean? I'll take your chapters either way.
Tom sounded like a real scum bag in my opinion, when Bill said about the tongue ring and all that. Instead of Tom saying, "Oh, no, it's not like that," he just grinned like a jerk and was like, "Yeah, OK, I'll let you put my dick in your mouth." Ugh, what a jerk. But I guess that's all part of the story. Or, my mind is too set in stone to be changed about the way things should be. I still like that story, though. It's phantasmagorical. I just really like that word. *giggle*
In response to your response to my last review: I can use my hand just as well. Makes it more personal, I think. And after this chapter, I think he deserves TWO spankings. *drool*

Author's Response: Oh gracious me! And! I actually was thinking Claire's! I love that place. So much awesome stuff! Tom is scum, but his fun scum XD And wow....that's quite the word. I feel proud. Can I put is on the summary part of the story? XD