Date: 09/26/10 04:16 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
WHAT HAPPENED???? D:
Great chapter!!!
Date: 09/26/10 03:55 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
Okay, no. You don't stop there. More now.
Date: 09/26/10 03:48 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
Yay, oh please don't forget this fic a second time haha. Truly amazing.
Date: 09/26/10 02:59 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
ah!! thanks for the update, but please don't take so long to update again. not with this cliff hanger!!
Date: 09/26/10 01:45 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
If you make us wait to find out exactly what happened as long as you did for part two I will bring out the whip. Not even joking. :grabby hands:
Date: 09/26/10 12:49 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
Oh NO!!! Tom! Bill! They were having such wonderful times at the market and Tom is always so cute even when he messes up. He's not used to being in such a possition but it suites him. I think Bill loves his cuteness and how he tries so hard to do and say the right thing. I think the food stalls made me hungry as well. I could almost smell the food and taste it as well. It does seem as though Bill knows everyone but he is right when he says that really it's that everyone knows him. I must say that I was worried that you had forgotten this story :( I love it and I hope that the update is not so far away this time and I really hope Tom and Bill are ok but I fear for them.
Date: 09/26/10 12:28 am Title: Chapter 11: To Market, Part II
:O
You cannot keep us hanging for two months with this!
Date: 09/24/10 08:46 am Title: Prologue: Children of Fortune
Hello yes your refusal to update this is slowly killing me.
SLOWLY
KILLING
ME
You are a terrible person, write another chapter
Author's Response: I think this was the one review that actually got me writing again. You may be a genius.
Date: 09/03/10 02:19 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
I can't wait to know what happens next =D ! PLease update soon =D !
Date: 08/24/10 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 8: Evening Falls
They're so cute =D
Date: 08/24/10 08:29 am Title: Chapter 2: Chaos Rising
I don't know if you meant it but Aile means wing in French =D
Date: 08/24/10 08:09 am Title: Chapter 1: Changing Tides
I love this second chapter =D
Date: 08/24/10 07:43 am Title: Prologue: Children of Fortune
Very very interesting, I like this universe =D
Date: 07/13/10 08:58 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
Eagerly awaiting whenever you are able to update ;)
Date: 05/18/10 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
I just started reading this fic the other day and it is AMAZING. I would love to live in the universe you created! I imagine it would be some sort of steampunk/middle-ages-but-with-awesome-modern-conveniences kind of world. The detail you put into the engineering of the clockwork and the different devices is awe-inspiring.
I noticed that you haven't updated in a long time, and I hope that you haven't abandoned this fic. I really can't wait to see how the rest of the story goes! And good luck writing your original story based on this fic! I think it will be a real work of art, if your writing in this fic is any indication.
Date: 03/30/10 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
"Hells"! I love it!
I'm so glad you are going through an original story about this one. It's only fair, though, since you've made such a great work so far. The plot, for a start, is terrific and the characters are completely delightful.
I'm getting fond of Temporalis' Universe and the whole clockwork-magicwork thing.
I understand the Timekeeper and anyother pieces of clockwork, mentioned in the story, are intended to point out the linings and foundations of Temporalis being powered by a really interesting mix of magic and mechanical work, but in the end, it's more than that, I think. I love the way you make use of these elements, as a motive, to refine the narration and to build up the atmosphere of the story in such a subtle way. In here, for exaple,
"Bill did as he had asked without pausing for even a tick of the clock, and Tom placed the frog on his palm"
It is a if the Timekeeper'd be another character as well. Let along Aile, which is lovely.
Anyways,I'm really, really enjoying it!
Date: 02/08/10 12:46 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
I am enthralled by this story, is it over already?? Please update soon, I'd love to read what happens next!
Date: 01/30/10 10:15 pm Title: Chapter 10: To Market, Part I
Grrr I already hate Anis! He's only just met Tom and he's already threatening to kill him!!
Date: 01/27/10 08:58 am Title: Prologue: Children of Fortune
The first chapter touches ones heart already. I love the bird. It is kinda like them yeah? A bit of clockwork and magic.
Date: 01/26/10 01:15 am Title: Prologue: Children of Fortune
I like this story so far, but you need it Betad. Like now. Run on murder. I like the characterizations a lot. Also, you are wonderfully consistent with the dialect you've created. There are spots where a single sentence could, honestly, be cut down into four. I had a terrible issue with run ons for years, so I understand it's an easy habit to get into. I've been a Beta over at FF.net for a few years, so if you'd like some help editing send me a message.