Wow, this is amazing.

At first I kind of skimmed it because it was written in block paragraph with no paragraph breaks and that kind of hurts my eyes. But then I saw the last sentence about Bill wanting to be called Sephia and so I read the entire thing and...

Wow is all I have to say to this. It's truly amazing and I love how you showed how insane Bill was to the real world but how completely normal it was to Bill.

...this inspired me. I don't know how. It gave me pictures :] Sunlight. Secret gardens. White, puffy clouds. I don't know. That's just the way my weird mind operates xD I build plot off of my pictures in my mind. But yeah, feel special because you may have inspired me big-time :]

I couldn't get past the first sentence of this without rolling my eyes and clicking away from the page.

You really need to not type like you speak. 'Like' isn't used in stories unless it's from a first-person perspective. And letters are not good to substitute for words. You're not having an IM conversation here, you're writing a story. You tell me what book or story you've read that has this kind of writing in it.

Okay, so I just read all seven chapters in about two days and I have to say that I LOVE this. It's really neat how Tom is like, not really bad but he's trying to make it so he's in control because he's dealt with really hard stuff before. And that he needs to control Bill because someone has been controlling him.

And poor Bill ;__;

But Tom really does care about him, right? *snif* He does care, it's just that he doesn't ever show it and his mind is pretty effed up from before, so he doesn't show it to Bill :/

...you're right. This is pretty freaking terrible, sorry to say.

I agree with the other review that was actually more than two sentences below me. I could add my own stuff but it would probably stretch out the page.

;-; This was so sweet. Really. I love how you made Bill so...I don't want to say weird, but that's what it is, I guess. Unique. Whatever. Whichever way you put it, you know what I mean. It was also beautifully written and even though there were only eleven chapters you somehow got an entire book in there. It reminded me of the book "Stargirl" and that made me happy because I really adore that book x]

Okay, now for some parts I especially loved.

You have definitely earned brownie points with me because you used the word 'brouhaha' in ch. 7 and that was just epic xD I never see that word anywhere and it made me laugh when I saw that you used it.

And then there was the part with the crane. I got tears in my eyes at that. It was so sweet. I love how everything Bill did had a purpose and you showed it.

You perfectly captured their personalities and really I couldn't suggest anything to this fic to make it better. I've seen this on the featured fic page but I never really got interested in it until I saw that my friend Ry (Twelve) had commented it, and she's a super-good author so I figured this was probably good, too.

And I was right :] I really loved this. I finished it all in an hour x]

So yeah. Das Ende :P

Oh wow, this is amazing O.o

I have seen it around the website for a while and haven't had the time to sit down and read it but I'm sick today so I thought I would read it whilst I'm writing Jonascest on Mibba xD

This is truly amazing, it really is. It's so much better than I thought it would be and I was hooked.

I guess it's because it's the incest/pedophilia thing, since I adore the really fucked-up pairings and such. It was amazing. It really was. I can't wait for the rest of the chapters. And don't worry, I'll read the story you asked for us to read xD So you don't have to whore the link everywhere xD

Bah, I just love this. There's a word for how this makes me feel and I don't know what it is, but yeah :]

Good job x]

It's not completed? Does that mean we get more chapters soon? (Then again, it's been two years so I doubt it.) But anyway, it's a sweet story and I'd like to see if you have anything else in store for it. Poor Bill :/

This was short but sweet. I liked it. Very reflective. And it gave me an idea for a fic, so you should be happy at that :] I like how it really went into the thoughts.

OH GOD. I have super-imagery floating around in my head right now. I have to write. Sorry this is so short but I have to go write or else the story idea will go away xD

I love it, by the way :]

Author's Response: Hey. Thank you very much. I\'m really glad it gave you an idea. \r\nYou didn\'t have to write anymore in this comment.

Wow.

I've seen this story like four times in the random stories thing, seriously, and I've kind of made it a mental note to write it down but never have. And so I saw it today and I was excited and clicked on it right away, and...

I absolutely adore how spot-on their personalities were. I tend to change the twins' personalities to fit my freaky supernatural stories and such and to give them different character traits in each story, but I don't think I've ever seen a oneshot with the twins' personalities as close to the real thing as this. Everything seemed perfectly in-character and I could see them doing every single thing, saying every single word, that you made them. Even Monica...I even liked her even though she was an OFC and she got Tom's number and everything. That idea has been done so many times but the fact that you didn't go into it past the phone number and the fact that you had the conversation leading up to it just shows how talented you were at portraying this.

I loved this. I'm serious. It's going in my favorites :)

And the last line was priceless XD

::lmfao:

"You're supposed to wear J. Crew and have a boring haircut!"

Even though I've never seen HP, this was just fucking awesome.