Reviews For In Tom's Eyes
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Reviewer: NightmareOrDream Signed [Report This]
Date: 09/08/10 11:42 pm Title: How I Know...

this is really sweet

Reviewer: Kiri Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/15/09 04:00 pm Title: How I Know...

Well, let me first say, I've read some of your others, but I've got in the habit of reading them before school and therefore never have time to review. I worked this out flicking through my history, so I'm back to leave them now.

I reallly like what you've done, just by focusing on his eyes. It's a really nice tool to use to tell the story.

My advice: describe Tom first. I know we all know what he looks like, but it makes the flow smoother. You don't need much, but where - in the first paragraph you're talking about what the others see you could just drop in a few lines about it. Not much, but what I found is that when you we talking about him later on, I found it incredibly hard to picture Tom, that said, I found, I often find it hard to picture people - I just couldn't this time .

Also, at the end of the paragraph when you do the '...it's in his eyes' having a 'because' before it makes no sense. You need to rearrange the sentence for it to make sense.

Other than that, utterly lovely!

Reviewer: Macbeth Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/19/09 08:11 am Title: How I Know...

This is really sweet. Really!

Reviewer: billtom_lover Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/09/09 03:40 am Title: How I Know...

Awwww how sweet, I wish I had a love like that XOXOXOXOXO

Reviewer: Nia Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 11:23 pm Title: How I Know...

Awwwwwww! *tacklehugglesnuggle* THANK YOU!

(It's on the 17th, though. Not this Friday =] ) I loooooved it so much! You're great, love.

And I love you, too! :D

Author's Response: Oh, oops! Oh well, a very very early birthday then! ^^ -huggles-

Reviewer: Synnie Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 09:57 pm Title: How I Know...

You've done it again, hun. You are amazing

Reviewer: iloveandy Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 08:24 pm Title: How I Know...

I loved it! SO beautifully written!

Reviewer: Reden49 Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 07:53 pm Title: How I Know...

aww so cute!

Reviewer: SimplyMe Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 07:28 pm Title: How I Know...

Really the only thing that can be said is : AWWWWWWW

Reviewer: SoXSpoke Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/08/09 06:55 pm Title: How I Know...

That was really good, I liked it, but I'm confused, so he never slept with any of those girls? They just think he did? or what?

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