Date: 09/24/08 05:44 pm Title: Chapter 3
Awww, I think this is really cute! =] But I think I got a bit confused during the flashbacks. *shifty-eyes* Those were flashbacks, right? *haha* Exactly how old are they right now? Tom is...6,7? But other than the slight confusion, I loved it ;) Don't keep us waiting too long! =]
Author's Response: oh thank you so much)rnno, those are not exactly flashbacks)) i mean, till the story is on its real way, i am just writing in whatever sequence i want)) once the age is really important, i won't let it be so vague)) rnTom is like 6, yeah)) but he may become younger again, you know,)) rnthank you so much, again)
Date: 09/12/08 11:56 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love thiiiiis
Author's Response: thank you!!!))
Date: 09/12/08 07:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
it's very cute and looking forward to more.
i like Bill and Tom's interaction.
There's a slight glitch though.. you referred to them as twins when they aren't one here in your story..
"Before this idea of his own room came up, he’d shared a bed with Bill in their parents’ room: it was a nice wide bed, the type that twins’ parents would buy for their children. It was supposed to be separated,"
Author's Response: i'm glad you liked it) rn oh no, i was only talking about the bed, and the part about twins was only to describe it) like, umm Tom was still little when Bill was born, and instead of buying a new bed for Bill, they bought a big one, for both boys (the one that's meant for twins). okay?)
Date: 09/12/08 07:09 pm Title: Chapter 2
aaaaawww cutest scene ever! ^^
Author's Response: oh, wow! thank you!!))
Date: 09/12/08 06:48 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love how you write this in a way that mimics how a small child really would think. The content is kinda silly (like the whole scene with Jorg putting togther Bill's bed), but said in the serious way only a little kid could get away with. This is such a great fic so far!
Author's Response: thank you so mcuh!)) i am so happy you think so))
Date: 09/12/08 06:28 pm Title: Chapter 2
I love the way you close the chapters!! ^^ sooooo sweet!!! I hope your gonna continue!! This is sooooooooo cute!!!! X3
Author's Response: thank you)) i hope i will, too)) thank you ^^
Date: 09/12/08 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
This is amazingly adorable =] I can picture them being something like this when they were younger...((only twins, of course)) I REALLY like it! Can't wait to see where it goes!
Author's Response: thank you)) well, you may picture them as twins, just let your Bill be smaller:)))
Date: 09/12/08 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 2
i like the way you write. i can't wait to see where your story is going.
Author's Response: thank you so much))! rnand you have wonderful green eyes)) wow.
Date: 09/12/08 05:04 pm Title: Chapter 2
So fucking beautiful!
Author's Response: thank you so much) honestly, thank you a lot))
Date: 09/12/08 04:24 pm Title: Chapter 2
AWWW so fucking cute cute cute cute cute cute!!!!
Author's Response: I am so glad you think so))rnthank you))
Date: 09/11/08 12:22 am Title: Chapter 1
good start
Author's Response: thank you))
Date: 09/10/08 09:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww, its really good.
See I told you, you're good.
Now all you have to do is realize it :)
Author's Response: thank you so muchrn<3
Date: 09/10/08 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
What a beautiful chapter! I can already tell this is going to be a fantastic story. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: thank you)
Date: 09/10/08 07:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awwwww, baby Tom and Bill cuteness! Go the fuck on!!
Author's Response: I'll do my best)) thank you)
Date: 09/10/08 06:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting... *strokes beard*
Author's Response: oh) thank you
Date: 09/10/08 06:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
aaawww that's cute x)
Author's Response: glad you think so)