Date: 09/20/13 03:48 am Title: Plenty of Changes
Ummm nice story but boring as hell
Date: 09/20/13 03:48 am Title: Plenty of Changes
Ummm nice story but boring as hell
Date: 06/13/10 07:52 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
Sweet.
Date: 05/04/10 11:38 am Title: Plenty of Changes
I lyk this story but wat happens 2 tom
Date: 02/21/10 08:10 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
Aww...i loved it!!
Date: 02/21/10 08:05 pm Title: The Second Time
Aww...poor billa...
Date: 12/05/09 03:23 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
Finally...
Date: 12/05/09 03:11 pm Title: The Second Time
Aww. poor Bill...
Date: 12/05/09 03:03 pm Title: Just Another Day
Sounds like fun...
Date: 09/22/09 02:53 am Title: Plenty of Changes
I think this is a great story and is quite realistic for teens these days. 4 and a half stars. It teaches you, that perhaps what your looking for has been there all along.
Author's Response: Awww... thank you soo much hunny. *hugs* That means a lot :)
Date: 09/08/09 01:43 pm Title: Just Another Day
Really good story, especially the end =D
Author's Response: Thank you soooo much dearie. I appreciate it (:
Date: 06/25/09 05:49 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
its a verrrrry good story.
im glad that Bill and Missy got together.
i knew Tom wasnt rite for Missy!
butt, grrreat jobb(:
Author's Response: awww thank you Kendra *hugs*
Date: 01/28/09 04:10 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
cutsie-wootsie mary sue.
lol kidding. I liked ut, it was sweet.
Author's Response: Danke darlin!! lol, thank you sooo much! <333
Date: 01/28/09 04:06 pm Title: The Second Time
oh.. poor billa...
*pats bill on back*
dont cry, you have no idea what this person will do to you later in the story, things might turn around!
Author's Response: yup yup!! Thank you soo much for reviewing
Date: 01/28/09 04:02 pm Title: Just Another Day
okay, cool story. how old are they in this one? bill and tom, i mean. even if they aren't brothers.
Author's Response: oh bout 17 and a half lol, thanx for reviewing hun!
Date: 01/19/09 10:01 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!
loves loves loves this !!!
this is just too cute !
you are an awesome writer !!
Author's Response: awwwwww thatnk you sooo much, that means a lot, really it does *hugz*rnrn
Date: 11/20/08 04:45 pm Title: Just Another Day
You're welcome sweetie. The story had potential it was just kind of empty. You'll get it eventually! Or you might have gotten it already, I haven't read anything else you've written yet. =)
Author's Response: Yeah, thanx, well, some of my other stories I didn't know about the Mary Sue guide and then I accidentally put a Mary Sue in a couple of my other stories, but I'm still a learner here, well thank you for taking the time to read my story!! ;D
Date: 11/20/08 12:11 pm Title: Plenty of Changes
uh third chapter was the best because the characters had more depth but it moved too fast and was too predictable. Oh and Tom/Bill/OFC means a threesome and there was no three some. Work on your mary sue and your bill sue and tom sue characters. They need to have more motivation. Before you write a story come up with a background for each character what they've been through and where they're going. That way you'll know the way they'll react to each situation they're put in. Plan out the story know what you want to happen and when and where it's going. If you do those two things before you write a story you'll and we'll be happer with the results.
Author's Response: Oh thank you so much for your advice, this story I was bored and it was one my firsts so yeah I thought it was a little rough too. But thank you so much for taking the time to give me this wonderful advice!!
Date: 11/20/08 12:01 pm Title: The Second Time
OMG so corney! too much too over the top bubble gum pop. Your mary sue is too much! The story is funny but it's just too underdeveloped.
Author's Response: I didn't want to be too detailed, but I guess I did the opposite, thank you for your advice! =)