Date: 03/17/24 09:49 pm Title: Call Me Daddy
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Date: 12/07/17 01:22 am Title: Call Me Daddy
this was really cute but also really hot ayyy :Q____
Author's Response: There will be more one of these days! ;) thanks for the review.
Date: 10/14/17 06:25 pm Title: Call Me Daddy
Actually!!!! Ok, I said you don't need to dedicate anything to me.. But I just realized... I've given you my 1000th review!! OMG. After seriously a million years on this site. HAHA. Wow. I'm surprise at how much of my life I've wasted on here. And also surprised that I noticed. I likely would have passed that milestone without noticing if it wasn't for you. So this is #1002. HAHA
Author's Response: Hahaha well I feel honoured! Lol
Date: 10/14/17 01:49 am Title: Call Me Daddy
Hmmm, incest is totally cool with me but this took a while to wrap my head around Tom being father not brother. Haha. And then the narration felt a little stiff. I'm really glad for the portion where you explained the life history that led to their relationship. And then towards the end it's interesting that you wrote in even bigger problems than dad/son... the smoking, not going to school, etc. Bill seems spoiled and Tom feels like an enabler. Hmm. I had to think this over and ask myself if this is a good plot twist for the story. Maybe it's more realistic, even if it's not pleasant. It actually makes me feel bad for you characters. Not cuz of their sexual relations, that part is "do whatever you want" in my opinion, but the avoidance of instilling work ethic in his son, and his son getting away with anything is what sounds unhealthy to me. Anyway. Well done. :) I'm excited to go read the second part of On Days now... I saw you updated. :)
Author's Response: I was literally waiting all day for your review! Lol because I knew you would want to review this one. I do agree with the narration critique you made. I wrote this story when I was a teenager, and it was difficult to re-vamp without changing it entirely because I wanted to stick to the original thought and story line. As I've mentioned in the story notes, I do plan to write and upload a sequel to it this week, so I hope that the sequel pieces together the avoidance of Bill's work ethic that you noticed in this piece. Bill's personality and frankly, laziness, were written as purposeful character flaws to make room for a sequel. Also, thank you so much for your thoughtful and constructive reviews on Off Days and On Days. I hope you're truly satisfied with the conclusion of On Days! But if you aren't, I know you'll let me know. ;)rnrnThe sequel to this will be dedicated to you, Ema21! So keep an eye out and again, thank you. :)
Date: 10/13/17 07:23 pm Title: Call Me Daddy
this was a good story!
please add a sequel to this
Author's Response: It's coming!