Date: 03/20/23 11:36 am Title: Chapter 3
This was such a good story!
Date: 03/12/23 07:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
I have left a review on other fics of yours, but wanted to say that I enjoyed this one too! Poor Bill lol
Date: 01/27/18 01:14 am Title: Chapter 3
Soo good! I loved it! d84;d84;
Date: 12/02/17 10:09 pm Title: Chapter 3
Omg I loved it!!
Date: 04/03/15 05:56 pm Title: Chapter 3
this was so hot and perfect ughh
Date: 02/09/15 05:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Alrighty! *rubs hands together* This was fucking EXCELLENT! From start to finish my interest and my excitement was nurtured and provoked and I absolutely adored every minute of reading this. Your use of verbs, the way in which Bill and Tom are so stable as characters and with their personalities not inconsistent as they usually are in this fandom, and especially the way in which you describe everything in such detail without giving us a headache from all the adjectives (I do this all the time omg) IS JUST SO GOOD. You created a perfect balance in this story and I really enjoyed reading this :-) You're very talented! (Not to mention this whole thing was just hot and CONSISTENTLY so).
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you ... If only everything reviewed like this, just showering me in compliments and not saying anything bad LOL haha Thanks for reading and enjoying!
Date: 12/19/14 08:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
rofl
picturing bills face when tom called him daddy
funny
Date: 12/18/14 08:39 pm Title: Chapter 3
Whoa, that teasing...! You are to the audience as Tom is to Bill. Making us wait for it, dragging it on and on, building up that sensation of want and need. Very nicely done! I had read your response to a review about the watersport warning, so I knew not to expect it, but I was still a bit disappointed. It's not a fetish for me, but in the right (written) setting, I find it interesting. It's usually not used as a toss-in, or for shock factor, but in a setting such as this - control, submission...But I can definitely see that Tom, in this story, wouldn't be into that - watersports is about humiliation, maybe degredation, along with control and submission. But I do think, as well as you wrote this, you could have done an excellent job at it! As for the breath-play - peeing is one thing, choking is something totally different! It always makes me a bit nervous to see any kind of choking/suffocation in an erotic story, because one, it makes me instantly claustrophobic, and two, I wonder if some readers would consider trying it, not having a clue as to how extremely dangerous it is. But, this is a story, and every author gets to write whatever the hell they want to, and every audience member is different! Some readers squick out at the watersports, others at the choking, others have no squick meter at all, bring on the donkey show! Anyway, I completely digress from the review. Nice little D/s tale, and well written. Thank you!
Author's Response: hey, wow, thanks for the awesome review! Yeah tbh I only put the watersport tag as a precaution because I didn't want people to be upset at the end, so sorry if I got your hopes up lol I will say though, I am interested in playing around more with watersport. I don't know enough about it right now to write it confidently but I will have to do some research and reading it on it to get more acquainted. rnrnI understand what you mean about the choking I suppose. Everyone has different fetishes they like, but I wasn't really trying to use choking as a fetish per se. I think there's a fine line between actual breath-play and a nice, firm grasp. But hey, thanks for being so open to different ideas! I really like to try new things and be adventurous. A lot of people aren't as open, so I enjoy your honesty and appreciation! Thanks for reading! :)))
Date: 12/17/14 08:50 am Title: Chapter 3
Yep! You were right. It was worth it. The ending was perfect. After all the torture Tom put Bill through he's right there to hold him and pamper him at the end. So long as I know that I can really enjoy all the sizzling hotness of the rest. ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I value the fluff just as much as the smut because it really does make it all worth it :) Thanks for reading!
Date: 12/17/14 01:07 am Title: Chapter 3
This was really dirty and I loved it. Lol
Author's Response: Thank you! Those were the goals :D
Date: 12/16/14 09:43 pm Title: Chapter 3
I love it love when bill calls tom daddy
Author's Response: OMFG! Thank you so much for saying that! I had a couple of people not really sure if they liked it, but I really really love it :) I'm glad you feel the same way. Thanks so much for reading!
Date: 12/16/14 08:00 pm Title: Chapter 3
"Bill wanted to live inside that kiss, life be damned if he ever saw the light of day again."
THAT is brilliance!
omg, this was so awesome! from tom trying to teach bill a lesson, to awesome sex, to sweet loving romantic twins...i just love sweet loving romantic twins more than smutty twins, to be honest. don't get me wrong. smutty twins are fucking amazing! but the sweet and the sappy and the i love you and omg i just want to die!
frankly, i'm surprised bill didn't wet the entire bed as soon as tom took off the cock ring.
so yeah, this was soooo good! bravo to you!
Author's Response: Aww thanks so much! I love it when someone quotes a specific line back to me, because I appreciate small details that make a big impact :) Tbh, I really do love fluffy twins, like you said! The smut is great, but what makes it worth it is the love and tenderness at the end :) Thanks so much for reading! I really appreciate your comments :)
Date: 12/13/14 08:18 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh, this is fun! I love a nicely written D/s story! And I'm really looking forward to the water sports! When D/s (in a story, anyway - I have no idea about RL D/s...somehow, I think I'd get bored with it) is done well, as this one is, the dynamics are so interesting. Reading this, I was reminded of Salty Wenche's Mirror Images, and how her Tom and Bill could get healthy and end up in a situation like this. It's fun to see a spoiled, not-used-to-limitations Bill being forced, by his twin and himself, to follow orders for hours and hours, despite the discomfort (or maybe even enjoying it). And Tom, the one in control, the one who obviously has better SELF control, acting almost as though he's making Bill a better person through his submission. How out of control can this "control" situation get, if you were to delve into it for longer than three chapters? Would Bill finally put a stop to it? It's easy to imagine them getting just a little toooo into it, and having it overlap into all areas of their lives. I've read a few really good D/s stories on this site that delve deeper into the fantasy. But it's fun when it's a bit on the fluffy side, like this - not tense or dangerous feeling, but still realistic and plenty of fun. Thanks for writing, there's been a bit of a dearth of good slash on this site :)
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this awesome review! I was kind of having a crappy day yesterday, then I got this review and it kind of made me feel better :DrnrnSo yeah, you're not the first person to ask me about writing a longer fic with a d/s relationship, and that kind of flatters me because my twin sister writes d/s as well, and I always thought she was way better at it lol So far, I haven't written a long fic with d/s, mainly because I find it super taxing to write. It takes a lot out of you to put all the stress, emotions, and suppressed desire into so many chapters. But I think it would be great if I could one day write a longer fic with this kind of setting. It really intrigues me to see the dynamics between them :)rnrnAnd to address your final note, D/S should ALWAYS end on a fluffy note IMO. A relationship between a Dom and his Sub is about pleasure for both parties. When the roleplay or punishment is over the Dom is supposed to take care of his Sub, or he's not doing it right. I partially blame Fifty Shades of Grey for exposing BDSM to the world as an almost violent partnership; IMO the story involves abuse, not legitimate BDSM relationship. So THANK YOU for pointing that out! rnrnI appreciate all of your compliments :) Feel free to check out my other BDSM fic, Trust, which also delves into other aspects of BDSM; a more mental journey that's almost as taxing as the physical :)
Date: 12/10/14 02:51 pm Title: Chapter 2
I really like the way Tom is with Bill. I would just be interessed in discovering their life arround that, in the current days and things that make them as master and submissive. Hope you let us know about their life or how they came to that and why etc...
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Hey, I'm glad you appreciate the d/s type of relationship with all it's facets, not just sex - but unfortunately, I started this fic as a one shot, not a long, in depth story :( I find the d/s relationship very interesting, but I think it would take a really long time for me to actually detail how this level of trust, dominance, and submission began. It's not something you just decide to do one day. I think it starts very young as a preference and builds to something beautiful when you find the right Dom or Sub. So for me to write such a fic would take awhile and a lot of commitment and planning. That said, I think I would love to right that type of fic, but I'm busy with my other long project right now. Maybe some time in the future I will do it! I think it would be great :)
Date: 12/09/14 05:27 am Title: Chapter 2
nice!
i cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for reading :)
Date: 12/08/14 10:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Dammit! I get so mad with asshole!Tom that I almost start hating him and then he comes out with something actually loving and then I'm back to where I was before. Typically I really don't like these types of extreme kinks with Bill but its with Tom and you can see that they love each other. And I can't resist a well written story! ;)
Author's Response: Haha aww thanks so much! I'm glad you gave my fic a try even though you don't read these types of fics normally :) I promise, in the end, everything they go through will be worth it ;)
Date: 12/08/14 08:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
i think the car ride home was my favorite part! tom "layering on the asshole" (my new favorite phrase), and bill wanting to write a song about what an asshole his brother is. and tom whistling and tossing his keys in the air without a care in the world. i loved it!
i have a feeling when bill finally gets to cum, it'll be massive. and i can't wait!
Author's Response: haha thanks! I was having some fun toying with Bill :) One of the things i love to do best lol I'm evil >:) He'll get to cum eventually . . .
Date: 12/08/14 04:36 pm Title: Chapter 2
:-)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading!
Date: 12/08/14 04:29 pm Title: Chapter 2
Bravo. I low that Tom has a very firm hold on Bill. I love that he punishes him and makes him endure so much sexual torture.
Author's Response: Thanks! I know some people don't enjoy bdsm as much as we do, but they are missing out! Bill getting punished is the best ;)))