Date: 03/30/10 06:15 pm Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
oh my god, this made me horny! holy schiesse!!!
Author's Response: O//////////////OrnLol thanks i guess!! =]rnDid it really?
Date: 03/30/10 03:26 am Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
I have to admit... the alternate names you used for Tom's dick was actually quite funny to me XD I was like "hmmm, never heard that one before"... hahaha... But, I did enjoy this nice scene of Bill being a sex slave... I have to say that the image is VERY VERY hot... I kind of wish he was my little sex slave *drools* ahhh, dreams! haha... Good job! *high five*
Date: 03/29/10 09:45 pm Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
Two words for you. Beta reader. Please.
Also. Calling Tom's cock a disco stick? Totally not sexy and ruined any bit of momentum you had going. And man tool and meat stick, too. That's actually kind of gross.
Author's Response: Lol what's wrong with disco stick? And i can see how meat stick is kind of gross, but man tool..... I dont see whats wrong with it. I dont wanna use cock and dick over and over again. But you did like it didnt you?
Date: 03/29/10 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
love it!
Author's Response: Im soo glad you did. And thanks for the review they give me confidence. =]
Date: 03/29/10 08:29 pm Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
that was creative and not poorly written! i liked it
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! =]
Date: 03/29/10 08:27 pm Title: Chapter 1 Who doesn't do cum-shots
Oh wow! The ending was interesting, but this is hot! I can totally see Bill as a sex slave like that... YUMMY!
Author's Response: I KNOW, I wish Bill was my sex slave!!! O_O rnrnlol I'm glad you like'd it.