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Reviewer: wastedgermanyouth Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/06/15 02:58 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

Pleeeeeease keep writing this, it's so good!

Reviewer: wastedgermanyouth Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/06/15 02:53 am Title: "Nothing. I'm just lonely."

Oh wow this is beautiful! Your writing and the pace is incredible. Something about it that makes me need to read each sentence so carefully. It's so brief and straight to the point that i'm afraid to miss anything. I'm craving for Tom to help him though!

Reviewer: GeisterfahrerOTE Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/13 12:15 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

Finish it!!

Reviewer: GeisterfahrerOTE Signed [Report This]
Date: 07/07/13 12:15 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

Finish it!!

Reviewer: 1zippy Signed [Report This]
Date: 12/22/10 10:29 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

aww this story is so sad yet well written :D please continue! but i sure hope no one dies, even though i know some one is going to XD

Reviewer: ArielBrianna Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/16/10 10:47 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

I think most people are probably confused about how is dying or is going to die. But I still love it. keep it up.

Reviewer: ArielBrianna Signed [Report This]
Date: 10/16/10 10:40 pm Title: "Nothing. I'm just lonely."

I have no idea what's going on yet, but I love it. very original.

Reviewer: Qwonny Signed [Report This]
Date: 08/17/10 07:49 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

I really hate it when people make a story and then drop it and don't even make a fucking effort to update for months. It's irritating.

Reviewer: thisnightsky Signed [Report This]
Date: 06/26/10 02:44 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

this looks amazingg.

Reviewer: BillsAngel Signed [Report This]
Date: 05/31/10 07:27 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

AMAZING!! Please keep going;)

Reviewer: bookofnicodemus Signed [Report This]
Date: 04/20/10 01:37 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

Why are there so many crappy finished stories and so many TOTALLY AWESOME unfinished stories?

It's your job to restore balance in the universe. MORE.

Reviewer: pookykabuki Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/25/10 04:46 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

I love the obsessive count down of time, down to the minute! It really draws me into the story; it can sometimes be difficult for an author to pull readers in that way, but I think the repetition of the count down is effective.

I think you could definitely spend some more time elaborating on the minute details of Tom and Bill's interactions, or Bill's thought processes leading up to his death. Or perhaps more painful ruminations on the many complex circumstances that are coaxing Bill into doing this.

Really looking forward to reading more!

Reviewer: Nikko Shiro Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/25/10 03:00 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

Hey, I'm loving it, make more! I'm not confused, got a few ideas about what's going on. Hurry up and finish it! Five stars, by the way :)

Reviewer: Rinai Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/03/10 05:10 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

so ....... is sure now!! i'm kinda starting to like it more than ten minutes ago! cool awesome amazing bill! puppies... yey i like dogs too....
hhhmmmm is it just me or bill wants to buy his mother a car?!
goood bill and poor bill he's all kind and yet he wants to do that stupid thing! ohh please stop the time!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It'll all be cleared up soon :)

Reviewer: Rinai Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/03/10 04:59 pm Title: "Nothing. I'm just lonely."

awesome!!!!

so damn curious now! i want to read it !

but my silly brain is confused because i don't get it why he wants to die!? he has a amazing brother, family...
anyway i'll read!

Author's Response: You'll find out soon enough! Thank you for reviewing!

Reviewer: cutupdreams Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/02/10 12:47 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

I just found this and am loving it! Please update soon!

Author's Response: thank you!

Reviewer: Tokio Jax Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/27/10 10:49 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

You need an explanation as to why Bill is going to kill himself and why he is making all these purchases. That might help clear things up.

Author's Response: Well, that's coming out at the end. It's the whole story, I wouldn't tell you in the beginning, because it's the climax.

Reviewer: Sieren Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/27/10 01:50 pm Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

I think the more i read, the more i will understand.

Author's Response: Okay. If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask. :)

Reviewer: MsGuemja Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/27/10 09:36 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

This is great, I am wondering what he has that makes him think he is going to die. So update soon plz??? I am waiting

Author's Response: Thank you! And hopefully you'll understand soon! :)

Reviewer: emochmcl Signed [Report This]
Date: 01/27/10 08:38 am Title: "There's nothing wrong, Tom, I'm fine."

No your doing fine I'm just wOndering how 24 hours turned into 119

Author's Response: It's kind of like a prologue, if you get what I mean- that paragraph is supposed to represent the day before he dies. Thank you for being specific- I'll change it so it makes sense. :)

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