Date: 11/06/24 08:30 pm Title: I Want Candy D...E...A...D
I am a Chinese fan who came a bit late. Discovering this website is the happiest thing for me in recent years. I used to use bookmarking as commenting. I must say that I have read and bookmarked this story. Reading this story is undoubtedly a pleasure! Today I plan to leave a comment. Thank you for your story. You are an amazing writer.
Date: 10/02/12 02:00 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
rofl that is cute and funny xD
Date: 10/20/11 12:51 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
it reminds me of that song '' I Want Candy.. Dead'' ;DD
Date: 08/31/10 12:08 am Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
im not sure you can murder someone with eyeliner and it not be completely ruined...this was funny. very cute. I hope youadd more storeis to this series.
Date: 03/03/10 01:20 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
LMAO thats AWESOME!
Date: 08/09/09 01:18 am Title: I Want Candy D...E...A...D
I love jealous Bill. I really really love jealous Bill. This is hilarious!!
Date: 07/18/09 09:04 am Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
I do love this series, I have to say. The commentary from Tom seems really like him and is really funny, not to mention Bill is absolutely adorable.
My first tip is that you have 'OMG' in the final section. The reason I don't like this is I don't see Tom thinking this, I can kinda visualise Bill thinking it, but not Tom. He'd probably be all 'oh f*ck' or 'oh christ.'
Other than that, I can't actually think of anything (although techinically you should put speech on a new line if it's a new person - but who cares?) except please pretty please put up the next one message me when you have!
Author's Response: o.o i just found this review and thanks for the suggestion. i think it's a good one. i'll change that for sure! and i'll definitely let you know when i have put up the next one.
Date: 07/15/09 04:30 pm Title: I Want Candy D...E...A...D
This is the first in the series, right? Well, again your plot is wonderful - and may I say your grammar is exemplary?
For this, I would recommend using bold or italics instead of caps. I know that technically they're not actually incorrect (kinda) but nor are they correct. I just don't like the way they look in a paragraph - it's quite unattractive. Oh, and you're missing a comma in your summary.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! And yes, it's the first in a series. There's a second one out, and I'm slowly working on the 3rd installment. Major thanks about the grammar! I try really hard. My high school english teacher really impressed grammar onto us. :D All the advice is lovely. I just saw another review from you on another story. I love reviews like this. It really helps; and, I know what you mean about the caps. I'm not sure why I used them instead of bold or italics o.O Anyway, thanks so much! Oh, and the comma? Huh...must check that! :D
Date: 06/19/09 11:42 am Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
that's funny!! i liked it. a softer side of tomi.....and he doesn't want to go shopping!!
Date: 05/19/09 03:06 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
haha lol i love the song and this just to funni
Date: 05/19/09 03:06 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
haha lol i love the song and this just to funni
Date: 05/19/09 08:45 am Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
OMG! That was amazingly funny! AWWW!
Date: 05/19/09 12:16 am Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
You have no idea how much the line: '“That little betch. I’mma betch slap the dumb out of her and then kill her…with my eyeliner.”' cracked me up. Ahahahaa! -laughs and starts to cry- Oh, maaaaaan. I could totally see Bill killing somebody with eyeliner! This is AWESOME. +Fave, most def! ~Inari
Date: 05/18/09 11:35 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
HAHAHAHHAA!
I'll try that one day
(that part of killing someone with an eyeliner!)
You were great!
*claps*
Date: 05/18/09 11:21 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
Made my day but I worry about the poor eyeliner getting close to her it did nothing wrong and does it's job well now will be subjected to torture. lol
Date: 05/18/09 10:53 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
Last line was classic, and will go down in history as one of the spiffest lines EVER! What the hell am I saying? The WHOLE DAMN THING was spiff, and I would shout that over hill and dale, and just LET someone try to say different!
Ok, rant done now, but it was hilarious, and I loved it! You go on with yer bad self, girlie!
Date: 05/18/09 09:08 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
i hope he doesn't completely ruin his eyeliner! i love it!!!!
Date: 05/18/09 09:05 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
Loved this! The first fic in this series was awesome...and this is the perfect continuation. I really can't wait for the third in the series!
Date: 05/18/09 08:30 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
Hahahahhahahahahah that was so funny!!!!
just like the original!!=DDD
you did a great job, as always=DD
Date: 05/18/09 08:08 pm Title: Let Me Borrow that Top, Betch
Ehehehehe. That was great hun!