Date: 10/27/16 05:23 am Title: Georg's Heartfelt Blunder
Just to let you know, you misspell the word rhythm pretty consistently. Other than that and a few minor typos, it's really good.
Date: 05/30/12 12:51 am Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
Your grammar's good, except for one thing. Every time a different person starts to speak, it's a new paragraph. So, instead of '"I can't," he whispered, his voice defeated. "I can't hurt him." Gustav struck Tom again, this time harder than he had before. It still wasn't as hard as Georg liked it, but Tom wasn't accustomed to have his brains beaten out. He yelped. Bill's voice reached Tom's ears, soft and reassuring. "Just do it, Tomi. Please. I want you to." Tom...' it would be "I can't," he whispered, his voice defeated. "I can't hurt him." Gustav struck Tom again, this time harder than he had before. It still wasn't as hard as Georg liked it, but Tom wasn't accustomed to have his brains beaten out. He yelped. Bill's voice reached Tom's ears, soft and reassuring.
"Just do it, Tomi. Please. I want you to." Tom...' =) Other than that, VERY well done ^-^
Date: 05/29/12 11:58 pm Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Dude... holy shit. Whoretel-san, this fic was AMAZING. A, it was all grammatically correct (YAY!!), and B it was REALLY hot. Well done.
Date: 02/07/11 12:28 am Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
Oh my god this story is making me want to try out bondage! (which is weird cause the thought of being spanked or whipped would normally freak me out). Gustav seems like a very good 'master'.
Date: 06/17/10 01:41 am Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Omfg. If you want sexy,come without touching yourself, to die for sex, this is the story! Hitting the top of my list of fav's for TH erotica!
Date: 02/12/10 03:18 am Title: Georg's Heartfelt Blunder
now i will forever think of bill as the Energizer bunny...
Date: 09/04/09 01:19 pm Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
wow.
This is so difficult to word, it was a mind blowing read. And so damn hot!
Date: 06/17/09 03:36 am Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Very well written or typed whatever.
Date: 05/13/09 09:40 pm Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
That was possibly the most twisted thing i have EVER read!
But i love twisted... ;)
Great read! Love the Saw pleasure/pain theme xD
Date: 04/11/09 01:06 am Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW DAMMIT!!!!
now you have that damned song stuck in my head!! UUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGGHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!
Date: 03/30/09 07:54 pm Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
This story is awesome! XD
And I love your little comments in the middle of some of the scenes.
Date: 03/28/09 11:55 pm Title: Tom's Carnal Craving
Tom cried and then blacked out. Circumstantially, that's actually really endearing.
Date: 03/28/09 11:42 pm Title: Tom's Carnal Craving
awww, that just made me love Gustav/Tom
Date: 03/28/09 11:01 pm Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
This story is amazing! :D
And I love the end, how Georg was putting on a show and then commented on how the toys were better this time.
I also have to mention that I love your writing style. You put in little terms and phrases that just made me giggle then drool some more. LOL
Date: 03/16/09 12:34 am Title: Georg's Heartfelt Blunder
Ohhh I love this one
Date: 10/02/08 12:22 pm Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Oooh .... Omg .... Oh ... HOLY FUCK!! *hyperventilates*
Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed! Thanks for the review!
Date: 10/02/08 12:12 pm Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Holy shnizzle!!!!!!! Your going to make my brains melt out through my ears. *drool* :P
Author's Response: I can try! Thanks for the review!rn
Date: 10/02/08 12:05 pm Title: Bill's Desperate Wish
Fuuuuuuucckkkkk. That was some steamy stuff!! But then again, Bill paired with anyone is HAWT!! Great job. *adds to favorites*
Author's Response: *wibbles* Thank you! <3
Date: 09/03/08 11:36 pm Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
omg Bill bone xDD it made me giggle!
Author's Response: Thank you! <3
Date: 09/03/08 10:43 pm Title: Gustav's Sweet Revenge [Updated!]
Seriously, you killed me. DomGus and SubGeo are just tooooooo delicious. Amazing.
Author's Response: If you like that, you should read Mirror Image by Salty Wench. She's the one that put that lovely image in my head to start with! <3 Thanks for the review!