Date: 05/01/23 12:25 am Title: The Dark Angel
I've mentioned this on other reviews: I came into the TH / THF fandom in Jan’22. The vast majority of fics I've read are quite old and I'm sure the authors have moved on (and probably wont even see new reviews), BUT I figure why not leave one anyway… I enjoyed this fic and wanted to say thank you for writing and sharing it!
Date: 10/05/12 12:39 am Title: The Dark Angel
o.o DA FUCK. I THOUGHT TOM LEFT BILL..
Date: 05/30/12 06:17 am Title: Red Roses
:/ you didn't say that you would stop... Or maybe you just havent got enough inspiration. I'll pray to the inspiratiin god to give you some nice ideas :) *prays* Don! Now, do you any ideas?;) Love this story, good thing with mathias and bill. I dont know, but maybe it is a good idea that tom becomes jealously of mathias? Or that damian comes to bill and tom when their wedding is, of when they are alone with their friends ans bills twin... Well, that were a few ideas i tought would be nice. Hope the next chap will be there soon. Xx
Date: 03/11/12 08:40 am Title: The Dark Angel
This was amazing.
Loved the rings
And the ending was soo cute I actually awed out loud haha
Date: 02/19/12 01:16 am Title: The Dark Angel
Okay... Well, I'm sure you know what I think already, thanks to my other reviews, but this could have been a lot better. It had the potential to be brilliant, amazing, beautiful... any number of adjectives meaning "good/pretty." Instead, it was melodramatic and confusing. You skipped over some very important parts and made some other important parts unimportant by making them so overdramatic that it almost made me want to laugh. Sorry if this seems like a flame, but I'm not trying to make it one. I'm just saying what I feel needs to be said.
Date: 02/19/12 12:56 am Title: The Dark Angel
Okay, where did that come from? With Tom and Andi, I mean. He'd gotten ANGRY at Megan for saying that, and then he went and said it to Andi. That makes no sense whatsoever. The Tom you'd been writing would have told Andi "Yeah, I'm sorry man. She'd wanted to go out on Saturday, and I told her you guys were coming, but she came over anyway," or something to that effect. SUUUUUPER OOC for your Tom, though I don't know how the real Tom would react.
Date: 02/19/12 12:50 am Title: The Dark Angel
No offense to your friend, but her grammar's terrible and she can't write smut. I understand it was her first time writing slash, but still. The first time I wrote slash, even though it wasn't GOOD, it still had a few basic facts straight. Like, for instance, that you have to prepare the uke or it'll hurt like hell. By the way, even though the story needs work, your grammar is amazing =)
Date: 02/19/12 12:30 am Title: The Dark Angel
YOU KEEP SKIPPING ALL THE MOST IMPORTANT STUFF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You can't DO that. It might be hard to write, but when you skip over the in-between stuff it makes the story confusing and it makes the "highlights" meaningless. I have no clue where this came from all of a sudden, and it really just doesn't make sense in the storyline. You also did that with Tom's phone-call to Megan. Without the backstory of their relationship - which we would have had IF you didn't skip over all the little conversations and things that go on between friends - her thing about Andi doesn't make any sense at all. And Tom's reaction to it DEFINITELY doesn't make any sense. I mean, if I heard my significant other saying that one of my best friends just wanted to get into my pants, I'd be pretty fucking pissed about that. Tom glosses over that without even acknowledging it and goes right into his "You can have a life but I can't" rant. You need to show more of the stuff before Bill comes in order for this story to really make sense.
Date: 02/19/12 12:22 am Title: The Dark Angel
You skip a lot of important parts of the story...it can be pretty confusing. I mean, what you didn't skip is good. But you're putting all the highlights into the story without any of the in-between stuff, which is just as important as, if not more important (sometimes) than, the highlights. Remember that all the juicy back-info about the characters comes out in the in-between stuff.
Date: 02/19/12 12:14 am Title: The Dark Angel
You seem to have skipped a chapter... it goes from Bill telling Tom he's a guardian angel to Tom being laughed at by Bill for believing him. If it's supposed to be the continuation of the last chapter, then it really should've been part of the last chapter. I think a better place to break it would've been after Bill walked away, when you wrote that Tom had been avoiding Bill.
Date: 02/19/12 12:09 am Title: The Dark Angel
Tom...must be so confused. New kid just... well, basically attacked him, and then told him he was a guardian angel... I'd be so confused. I'd be like "wait, what the fuck? Who does this guy think he is and what is he talking about? Is he a stalker or something?" XD But I can't wait to see what happens.
Date: 11/05/11 03:23 pm Title: Red Roses
this was soooooo good... I really adore your stories... and on the beach under the stars... it's like... SO PERFECT... and yes please... would also like some smutty smut... *giggles* but stil love love love the storie...
Date: 06/26/11 03:28 pm Title: Red Roses
wow, I just realized I forgot to review! :O
anyway, it's just awesome, no other words can describe it ^^
btw, it's been three weeks and a day since you last uploaded a chapter.. what's up with that? :(
Author's Response: i've been working hard on my Big Bang fic for a while. though i did start writing the next chapter, my computer messed up and i realised i didn't save the chapter >.< my luck is so terrible xD but next week i am planning on going back to writing the next chapter again, i don't want you all to think i've abandoned this fic ^-^ <3
Date: 06/05/11 05:59 pm Title: Red Roses
Awww that was a cute way to end the chapter.. Very sexy to have sex on the beach always wanted to try that myself worried about the sand and bugs :( LOL Great job on the chapter though AWESOME!!!!!
Date: 06/03/11 09:12 am Title: Red Roses
Aw!!! That was soooooooooon sweet!!!
So perfect...
Date: 06/03/11 02:58 am Title: Red Roses
sweet. yay for four years. =)
Author's Response: yaaay ^-^
Date: 06/03/11 01:22 am Title: Red Roses
I hope to be up for the awards!!! Making love on the beach-nothing more romantic than that and I just love that Tom is about to make Bills dream/fantasy come true!
Author's Response: i knoooow ^-^ isn't Tom such a sweet soon-to-be-husband? xD
Date: 05/30/11 06:14 am Title: Red Roses
A part of me thinks that Mat is decieveing him e.O
Author's Response: well...Mat isnt exactly 'decieveing' him...he's just having conflicting emotions =3...im seriously sticking up for my own OC...im completely insane >.>
Date: 05/29/11 02:41 am Title: Red Roses
I'm interested to see where this is going, because it does feel a little different. thanks for the update!